The Shadow of the End
Another poem in the collection.
I love you so much I have burned holes in my soul.
It was toxic magic to me, burning through my atoms,
Poking first one hole and then another before, at last,
I was illuminated like an arrow-downed monster
Bent like a bow in the air with porcupine quills of fire.
I love you so much I’ve combusted like a star.
.
Except I only love you after the red sunset bleeds out and night drops.
I only love you in the safety of my head when the fog has rolled in
And covered my face, my breath, my desires with its white blanket.
.
I am choking, lungs filling like buckets with water
Because I cannot give up the chase of loving you,
Not even if I am trembling from the cold and blue.
I’ve always been blue around the edges with you,
Too afraid of what might happen to let go of my breath
But look, look at how right I turned out to be.
.
There is a chanting in my head, windchimes whistling in my throat.
I’ve abandoned the principle of the matter and swallowed the farce
But I can’t figure out how to get back to something I cannot remember.
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This is a piece in a series I'm putting together. The others are below. It's really starting to get long! (Plus there's thirty other poems already put together).
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Silver Daux
Shadowed souls, cursed magic, poetry that tangles itself in your soul and yanks out the ugly darkness from within. Maybe there's something broken in me, but it's in you too.
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Standing While Falling
Quotation from Friedrich Nietzsche "He who wrestles long with monsters should beware lest he himself become a monster. And if you gaze long into an abyss, the abyss also gazes into you. Man is not destroyed by suffering, but by the meaning he makes of it."
By LUCCIAN LAYTH5 days ago in Critique
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Stunning 🤩 I’m amazed by this one! Great job! 👏 It’s amazing when we feel the words as we read them.
Your ability to capture the readers attention and hold it, is demonstrated throughout this gem. Congrats on your TS, Silver!
Congratulations on top story. This was so heart longing. Love it.
First off congratulations on Top Story This is absolutely beautiful. I would like to ask, is this an unrequited love scenario?
Woohoo!! Back to say congrats on Top Story, SD!! 🎉
Congratulations on Top Story!!!
Very beautiful
Another stunner, Silver! “ I’ve always been blue around the edges with you” really struck me with its brilliance. Congrats on Top Story!
Oof, this painful. I love your word choice and flow. Congrats on top story!
This is so incredible! Your word choice never ceases to amaze me and this piece is absolutely no exception. Can’t wait to check out the others!
Ooooo! I like that this is a series, I'll have to check out the others! Will you maybe turn these into a book at some point??
Dang... pretty awesome
These are my favorite lines, lines that stuck with me and wither made me go, "yes, yes", or was a forceful or striking image when I read them "Bent like a bow in the air with porcupine quills of fire." "There is a chanting in my head, windchimes whistling in my throat." "I only love you in the safety of my head when the fog has rolled in" I love you so much I’ve combusted like a star."
Very poignant and beautiful with a flow that enraptures the reader. It had me!
O. M. G.! JUST WOW!!! The last line broke me! Thank you for sharing your soul.
You have effortlessly expressed the ache we endure not wanting to admit it makes more sense to quit
That first line hooked me, then it got better from there. Excellent work.
This was incredible, as ever. Felt so much anguish, pain and almost hard-to-describe pain, but yet, you did it so well, as you always do. Will definitely be bookmarking this piece so I can work my way through the others listed, in case there are some I've missed! So well-penned. Question - this series - will you be doing a book with it? Know this, if you are - I'll be buying a copy double quick lol! Well done, I've said that again now. My Repeater lol.