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The First snow

For Vocal Challenge: Frosted verse

By Maryam BatoolPublished about a year ago 1 min read
My first frost

In the barren land, stiff trees and sand

Harsh scorching air and a dusty layer

Dazzling rays of sun felt no more fun

Glare of the heat burnt both my feet

Suffocating 'around', to which I was bound

Wished to see crisp, and enchanting sound

Heavens responded— I was unbounded

My pupil witnessed a sparky blessing

My first frost, first day, first host

Glow on the street, it was all a treat

A new discovery, pieces of flurry

White pearls from sky, disappeared; 'my worry'

Bare step on crystal brought on a giggle

Feeling was miraculous, it was perfect—fabulous

My ecstasy bawled, but what was it called?

I was intrigued yet a small kid screamed,

"He he~ Do you know? It's called the snow!"

They rolled another ball after one throw

It was my first time, It was before 9

Snow frost and I, looked into the eye

I hugged it tight, It was the best sight

I felt it in my hand, instead of sand

While I was vaguely zoning out, the little kid once again did shout,

"See? What was God's plan? Meet my cute, sweet Snowman!"

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Maryam Batool

I'm 17

I'm a storyteller who loves poems, fiction, and romance. Creativity is my constant companion. I take joy in turning thoughts into worlds. Writing is my way of exploring life and connecting with others

Ready to let my writing bloom!

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  • Susan Payton10 months ago

    Bare step on crystal bought on a giggle. Beautifully Done.

  • Caitlin Charltonabout a year ago

    I paused when I read (in the barren land), because you got me. I have a silly smile on my face because I felt it in my soul. It’s such a powerful first few words. This line took me to another place (My first frost, first day, first host) I love how it read as though you were slowing…down…time. I just looooove how playful this was, and when you mentioned the child, I felt as though I was a child again, happy and giddy at the thought of the snow. A very well done to you Maryam, I am now on cloud 9.

  • Karan w. about a year ago

    Wow, this poem is just so beautiful and touching! It paints a lovely picture of someone experiencing snow for the very first time and having fun playing in it. The words are written so beautifully, and it captures that special moment. Loved your poem, dear sister!

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  • Cindy Calderabout a year ago

    This is a really sweet and altruistic view of winter's charm. Well done!

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