The First snow
For Vocal Challenge: Frosted verse

In the barren land, stiff trees and sand
Harsh scorching air and a dusty layer
Dazzling rays of sun felt no more fun
Glare of the heat burnt both my feet
Suffocating 'around', to which I was bound
Wished to see crisp, and enchanting sound
Heavens responded— I was unbounded
My pupil witnessed a sparky blessing
My first frost, first day, first host
Glow on the street, it was all a treat
A new discovery, pieces of flurry
White pearls from sky, disappeared; 'my worry'
Bare step on crystal brought on a giggle
Feeling was miraculous, it was perfect—fabulous
My ecstasy bawled, but what was it called?
I was intrigued yet a small kid screamed,
"He he~ Do you know? It's called the snow!"
They rolled another ball after one throw
It was my first time, It was before 9
Snow frost and I, looked into the eye
I hugged it tight, It was the best sight
I felt it in my hand, instead of sand
While I was vaguely zoning out, the little kid once again did shout,
"See? What was God's plan? Meet my cute, sweet Snowman!"
About the Creator
Maryam Batool
I'm 17
I'm a storyteller who loves poems, fiction, and romance. Creativity is my constant companion. I take joy in turning thoughts into worlds. Writing is my way of exploring life and connecting with others
Ready to let my writing bloom!
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Comments (5)
Bare step on crystal bought on a giggle. Beautifully Done.
beautiful.
I paused when I read (in the barren land), because you got me. I have a silly smile on my face because I felt it in my soul. It’s such a powerful first few words. This line took me to another place (My first frost, first day, first host) I love how it read as though you were slowing…down…time. I just looooove how playful this was, and when you mentioned the child, I felt as though I was a child again, happy and giddy at the thought of the snow. A very well done to you Maryam, I am now on cloud 9.
Wow, this poem is just so beautiful and touching! It paints a lovely picture of someone experiencing snow for the very first time and having fun playing in it. The words are written so beautifully, and it captures that special moment. Loved your poem, dear sister!
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This is a really sweet and altruistic view of winter's charm. Well done!