Swinging on the Moon
And Riding the Stars
There’s a crescent moon tonight.
It looks like a hammock, and I wonder if you’re laying on it.
Swinging like a child, crooning like a songbird.
Holding on with one hand,
A rum and coke in the other.
*
There are a million bright stars tonight.
They look like diamonds, and I wonder if you’re riding them.
Joy in your heart, as you soar through the sky.
Holding on to the tail of a comet.
For a trip round the sun.
*
There’s an ache in my heart tonight.
It looks like emptiness and I wonder if you can feel it.
Looking up at the moon, a tear on my cheek.
Holding on to the memories,
When I`m reminded that you're not here.
*
There are no clouds in sight tonight.
It feels like I can see heaven, and I wonder if you`re watching.
Telling me to smile, and remember the good times.
Filling my heart with peace and tranquility.
As I watch you, drink in hand, swinging on the moon.
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Cathy holmes
Canadian family girl with a recently discovered love for writing. Other loves include animals and sports.
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I had not read this piece before which connects to your Haiku. Beautifully expressed. Well done Cathy. ☺️
You made me feel all the feels with this. Lovely piece. Hard to imagine that you've only recently taken to writing.
Great last stanza… remember the good times. Filling my heart with peace and tranquility.
A beautiful tribute.
Great Piece and Deep Feelings 🫶🏾💯📝☺️‼️
This is such a beautiful piece! GREAT poem Cathy!!
WOW! “There’s a crescent moon tonight. It looks like a hammock, and I wonder if you’re laying on it. Swinging like a child, crooning like a songbird. Holding on with one hand, A rum and coke in the other.” I will never look at crescent moons the same again. Such beautiful imagery. I love the haiku, but I prefer this longer version. I love the way you have held onto memories, but also imagined a new life for them, even if they’re no longer in this physical realm.
Sooo touching and beautiful!! I am going to echo everyone and say I had NO idea this was where your winning haiku came from -- so amazing!! 😍😍
Loved this especially the title Swinging on the moon. Great job!
Wow, this is exceptional. I love that you condensed the hook line for the winning haiku. ❤️❤️❤️
This was so beautiful! I didn’t realize your haiku originally came from one of your longer poems! ❤️
So beautiful 🥰🦋
Thanks for sharing this again. Sometimes you wrote something that you know is darn near perfect, because your emotion come through on this one Cathy.
❤️❤️ this is simply stunning.
Good read. Very nice work.
This is so beautiful <3
Beautiful…so surreal and beautiful Cathy ❤️
Nice easy read❤️
Beautiful! Just the right balance of imagery and emotion. Well done
Wonderful... Filled with much imagery and touching thoughts.
This was beautifully melancholic