Surrender
A Descent into the Void of Madness
The clock shrieks, a banshee's cry,
The air thickens, the world goes dry.
Whispers crawl beneath my skin,
A deranged voice, a twisted grin.
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Shadows stretch with soulless eyes,
The mirror cracks, revealing lies.
I scream, but none can hear my plea,
My mind teeters, set to flee.
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The ground gives way, the void calls near,
I reach for light, but it disappears.
Silence swallows, the darkness calls,
"Surrender now, and lose it all."
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Comments (6)
Incredible poem, Dr. Jason! Thanks for sharing this piece ❤️
This is a real picturesque poem of fear and fright. Good job.
Chilling! I love the concept of the mirror cracking and revealing lies and if the pretty image on it's surface withheld the truth like a snapchat filter.
Surrender: great topic, you're a good writer
Very well written. It's amazing how much can be conveyed with so few words
Marvellous I love this it captured me from the start♦️🖌️📕🏆♦️