Staying Above Water
Finding the will to keep swimming
The fire in your lungs
Extinguished with your last breath
A harsh battle lost
I imagine you
Floating in celestial air
Free from pain on Earth
I’m not brave, Mama,
I am tired, fragile, lost
Drowning without you
Pulled under, eyes shut,
I hear you whisper, “Just breathe,
Then live, love, and swim.”
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Quotation from Friedrich Nietzsche "He who wrestles long with monsters should beware lest he himself become a monster. And if you gaze long into an abyss, the abyss also gazes into you. Man is not destroyed by suffering, but by the meaning he makes of it."
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❤ Beautiful.
very moving poem, sorry for your
I feel your pain. 🥰. Love your moving poem. Welcome back.
I'm so sorry for your loss! 🥺 This was very emotional! Beautifully written!
A wonderful tribute with beautiful words, 💕
My condolences, Lori. Awesome, totally awesome 💕💖😊
This is beautiful. I am so sorry for your loss.
Oh my goodness, this is gorgeous. I am so sorry for your loss.
A beautiful and loving tribute. I felt your love for her here.