Sky's Last Veil
Don’t spread your wings for those who wouldn’t notice your flight
Broke through sky’s last veil
No oxygen, I stiffen—
Died for their high hopes
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Author's Notes
This was written for Vocal's Sky-ku Challenge. Sometimes, we tend to lose ourselves trying to fulfil people's sky-high expectations of us. Even if we exit the atmosphere, it still wouldn't be enough for them.
A Haiku is a type of non-rhyming Japanese poem that always uses the same number of syllables in a three-line format:
- the first line has 5 syllables
- the second line has 7 syllables
- the third line has 5 syllables
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This was so stunning and all too relatable for me as a people pleaser haha!
Manipulation is rampant in relations. No need to dance to the drums of others.
A powerful Haiku. Thank you so much. Hugs.
Very meaningful and beautifully done with such few words.
Always see your own hopes, Dharrsheena. Lovely haiku, and very thought-provoking.
Ouch and I relate all too well. This should have been a T.S. in my humble opinion.
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Deep meaning..
informative article
I felt this line "Died for their high hopes" so deeply, because sometimes we really do stretch ourselves too far just to meet what others expect. Thanks Dharrsheena for putting that into words so powerfully!♥
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amazing heart touching story
the imagery is lovely... the story a bit sad.
Loving your intricate mind, my friend
Your haiku brings up a painful truth. Such a powerful piece.
Very few words but such a powerful impact. Very well done.
Yipppppppe...I liked this Post soooooo much :) :3
When I saw the picture I thought this Haiku was going to be sweet. Not so sweet, but achingly well written!
nice
A wonderful Haiku.
Happy New Year, Dharr 💖💖 I'm really honored and blessed to have met a beautiful and crazy 😆 friend like you. Thank you so much for always responding to me with an ocean of love. ❤ I wish to meet you in person someday and I'll crack all the jokes with you! hehe May God bless you with every beautiful thing in this world❤ May you smile a lot, in 2025. You're one of the most beautiful memories I've made in 2024. I'll grab a coffee with you in the future, I'll come with my mom. Malaysia's kinda familiar to us. 😉 And May your wish to 'DIE' never comes true, not even when you're a 100-year-old. I'd love to introduce you to my great-grandchildren 🤣
nice
Very strong and meaningful 🏆
What a striking poem! Very strong!