Reinvention
For L.C. Schafer's Dollar Challenge - Invention Addition
I loved her to the point of invention
Ignored her barbed tongue and condescension
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I gladly tore down the self I had made
Breaking piece by piece with hammer and blade
From the wreckage she chose a few fragments
Soldered them with narcissistic pretense
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What of the insides, the brain or the heart?
Proper devotees don’t need to be smart
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No need for a beat, internal rhythm
Only a recursive algorithm
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She ordered me buffed, shined to perfection
My only light came from her reflection
After a while, playthings are outgrown
Tossed under beds, nothing but rag and bone
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In the shadows, her creation crumbled
In refuse, a spark remained, humbled
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Using pain and hope as equal parts fuel
Sparks become fires, forging new tools
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Drawing blueprints for the me I would build
Placing my heart in the space she once filled
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Plenty of windows, doors in my design
For fresh air and kindness, old friends of mine
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Embracing new dreams, my imperfections
I loved myself to the point of invention
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About the Creator
Sean A.
A happy guy that tends to write a little cynically. Just my way of dealing with the world outside my joyous little bubble.
Comments (11)
The character's resilience really shines through in this one.
I love the the optimism ♥ Goes really dark for a bit, and then steers back out to the sunshine ☺
This is an amazing poem, with lovely rhythm & rhyme & humour & depth! I especially like: “ She ordered me buffed, shined to perfection My only light came from her reflection”✅
What a painful yet beautiful full circle journey! Fantastic rhyme too! Absolutely dynamite take on the prompt!
Well-wrought, Shaun! Reinventing ourselves is a difficult task, but once begun, proves better than letting ourselves go.
“Using pain and hope as equal parts fuel” I absolutely love that line!
Clever rhymes throughout. And I loved that ending!
<3 This is the one. Right. Here. Perfect.
I love how you went with self love for this challenge!
A cool take on the prompt, Sean! When they fail to love us to the point of invention....we must do so for ourselves!
Very nice job on this entry for that challenge! I loved how you “broke” it down and then rounded out the ending with a rebuilt model!