i need
to catch your attention
trap your heart
and bind your soul
in less than three whole minutes
i need your compliance
for maybe
a minute more
and your attention
for a bit less
i need to state my case
show my face
obscure my place
and start this race
and at the same time
stripes for racing
stripes for pacing
striped from facing
striped for a placing
RACE...
like an ad lib backstory
made up entirely
on the spot
like a real horny salmon
up those rapids
like a rat
up a drainpipe
like an umbrella salesman
caught in a city blizzard
a maelstrom of ice and rain
and wet cashed up commuters
like a grand prix driver
like a deep sea diver
like a seedy skiver
like a piledriver
all wacked up
all jacked up
all smacked up
on Viagra
and CIA amphetamines
hard, horny and on hold
About the Creator
Bren
"It's just a token of my extreme!" - Frank Zappa
"Cause it's all in the heat of the moment It's all in the pain!!!" - Devin Townsend
Centre Stage with the wonderful Heather Hubler
I'm writing it out not acting in doubt!
Reader insights
Outstanding
Excellent work. Looking forward to reading more!
Top insights
Compelling and original writing
Creative use of language & vocab
Easy to read and follow
Well-structured & engaging content
Eye opening
Niche topic & fresh perspectives
Expert insights and opinions
Arguments were carefully researched and presented
On-point and relevant
Writing reflected the title & theme
Heartfelt and relatable
The story invoked strong personal emotions
Masterful proofreading
Zero grammar & spelling mistakes
Excellent storytelling
Original narrative & well developed characters
Comments (2)
It seems we are unknowingly twinning. Mine was inspired by Borges "The Perpetual Race Of Achilles And The Tortoise". I guess you had a closer encounter with the pinstripe suit with this one. It's amazing how you can always weave your words into this surreal tapestry. This mosaic is so vividly shimmering, varied, and valued.
I really loved this! I love the way it reads, it has such a great staccato beat to it. Great work.