Watch the drifting snow,
How it frosts the budding trees.
Winter lulling Spring to sleep.
And yet, the robin
While watching the drifting snow
Still readies his throat to sing.
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A sedoka is a style of Japanese poetry consisting of two stanzas with three lines each and a syllable count of 5-7-7 or 5-7-5. It is called a sedoka (a poem where the head is repeated) because the first line is repeated. The nature of this style of poetry is believed to be a recitation of a question and answer between two lovers. More information about sedokas can be found here.
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Comments (9)
GORGEOUS. I was born in March and truly love the concept of early spring and robins. :)
Awww, this was so wonderful! I loved it so much!
This is great! I love snow and robins and this is genuinely fantastic!
Beautiful
Love the words and the image ❤️
Beautiful ❤️ Spring will still come even when winter tries to keep going.
Beautiful piece. Well done
Oh, this was beautiful and felt so full of hope. I loved that final image of the robin and the word 'still'. Really great work :)
very nice, eyes open for them orange breasted feather friends, great job