Light in the wee hours is crepe-like;
white, draped gauze across a wound.
Forgotten, now, the injurious moment,
to all but two: flame and shadow.
A place is outlined between them
as by the weight of a fingernail—
swift on the toes of night. Those who see
see the dawn and stretch out their wings.
Lo, at the coming hearth, flame sees you.
The shaed realm had kept you safe, and I,
unsure of happenstance or incitement,
dimmed my fire to smoldering coals.
Burrowed deep within the earth, long
asleep, they did not stir, yet I set a wildfire
avow. My light in the mid-hours
catches peony colors in sharp contrast.
Pray tell: what’s in a name—
sorrow and misery? The truth is denied.
Repentance? Nay—dash it upon the rocks!
You must have learned from tenderness
and pity; your mother’s sister. You favor
a gentler façade, feminine in total eclipse.
For light at evening is cut with blush;
draped silk around the hip.
Shadow and flame know an illusion: this,
the ancient serpent. Lo, you wear him well
in all your incarnations. What is it this time?
Plentiful grins? Honeyed words on a new tongue?
How you forget: mouths have an inset posture.
The foulest, forked palate is not usurped
by pleasantness. You well know, any fool
can feed the devils, be them crumbs,
be them cakes. All the smiles burn to ash.
See, promises remember and guilt forgets,
it pokes and prods, learns to peddle names
and as for flames, I hear they count shadows.
My wildfire will ravage innocents. Your
black lotus—illusory, slick, transmogrifying
endlessly. Light in blackest night blinds all
without trying, and you’ll lose petals in bear traps.
But I vow to remain dimmed. Come out!
You must know yourself to be at home here,
this land of the shaed. Not one knows its depths,
though I suspect you can manage beasts.
Pray—What’s in a name? You bear no fruit,
no, but take as much as you can carry:
apple, pomegranate, melon; else they’ll rot.
Such food is beloved by the corrupted.
One such remains elusive: the cherry:
bitter, black. Shadow has the due credit,
shrouding it as invisible as itself. For it is.
I hear it makes a sweet liqueur. I hear
of a secreted region in Dalmatia,
one which bears a familiar name. Oh—
but what’s in a name? False, Dalmatia.
Home of the amarasca. You know
and I, the layers of sugar atop a delicate,
sour flesh. My well-wishes go to shrouded
adventures and reinventions. Light
in the early hours creeps, breath-like
over a history since erased; thin
as a blink-and-you-miss-it. Once,
this flame sought the ill-begotten truth.
Knowledge beads off a well-oiled pelt.
About the Creator
Mackenzie Davis
“When you are describing a shape, or sound, or tint, don’t state the matter plainly, but put it in a hint. And learn to look at all things with a sort of mental squint.” Lewis Carroll
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Comments (26)
Woah. Incredible! 🙌🏽👏🏽✨🩷✨
Circling back to say congrats on winning the Lantern Light Challenge, Mackenzie!!!
Congratulations on the win!!! ♥️♥️
Wooohooooo congratulations on your win! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
Congratulations! Really love "crepe-like" in the opening line
Back with Congratulations to you 🥳🥰
CONGRATULATIONS ON THE WIN
congratulations on your win :) and your top story!
Back to say, congratulations!
Congratulations, Mackenzie! 😊
Lovely dreamy meanderings of what it is to be. You create some beautiful images here Mackenzie. I loved ‘ For light at evening is cut with blush; draped silk around the hip.’ I’m currently trying to catch up with some of my readings, so apologies for late comments x
Just gorgeous, Mackenzie!! Belated congrats on Top Story!!
Wow so rich and deep. Excellent poem. Congratulations on top story.
Beautiful descriptive poem, a real pleasure to read. Thankyou for sharing and well done on Top Story xx
wonderful
Nice
There’s a haunting duality running through this poem that reminds me of the masks we craft to protect our most fragile selves. The rhythm feels almost incantatory, like a spell unmasking its own creator.
Mesmerizing
Congratulations. This poem is absolutely stunning.
congratulations on TS. This is truly magnificent!! Bravo and Kudos.
Nice
Always a pleasure to walk through your words
Soooo good. Gosh I’m addicted to your writing style. I can’t explain how much I enjoy reading your poems.
This is very Shakespearean, makes us see lots of things, surely a Top Story
This feels powerful and mysterious. The imagery of light and shadow is so vivid. Really haunting in the best way.