On Being Grateful You Used Pencil
a nonet
Hommage Γ Ilse Werner Photograph by Victor Stamp
I forgave your mistaking today
for forever, for penciling
hearts next to all the dates on
the calendar of our
lives together, I
erased them while
you slept, I
loved you,
did.
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Comments (26)
Well done on placing in the challenge β .
This is outstanding. Congratulations
Penciling hearts on a calendar and then erasing them is soo powerful. You managed to say so much in so few words. So glad this placed! Congrats
I love this! Congratulations! It is art, period.
This descriptive imagery says so much more than even the words. Wow! I can easily see why it was shortlisted. You deserve some big "WOOT-WOOTS!" Job well done and mega-congrats for placing in the challenge!
Well done on your challenge placement ππ»ππ€ππ«Άπ»
I love your nonet - congratulations on your win!
Ooh, I love how you phrased the last two lines. Congratulations, Ava!
Congrats!
Your writing style is so original. I love it! Congratulations!
this is so beautifully and painfully crafted. well deserved win! congrats!
Wooohooooo congratulations on your win! ππππππ
Congrats, Ava! Well deserved placement in the challenge!
Oof itβs heavy Ava. Love the past tense in the final word- says it all really. The idea of erasing is a such a fascinating one for something like a relationship thatβs nearly over.
Really striking- thoughtfully and beautifully composed!
Uh huh! Erased π
Ha, it is a nice poem where teaches us to think about who helped you in the past!!!!!!!!!
Forgiveness is crucial part of our life ,but forgiving repeated mistakes is not encouraged
What a great image in the pencil! So simple yet meaningful. Impermanence. Erasable. Makes me think of all the things I need to erase..... π
Stunning imagery with a big emotional impact! Great nonet, Ava!
Beautiful, strong and sad at the same time. You have a way of writing poetry that is quietly powerful
If only we had erasers for our hearts . . . Well done, Ava! I love your Nonet!
Beautiful and heartwrenching!
Great take on the challenge and wonderful that you are back
This is wonderful. Love the image of erasing the hearts. Well done.