You come and you go,
yet you never leave me.
Are my actions as steadfast?
My loyalty as true?
... < ... > .... < ... > ...
Sometimes you rush, and
others, you linger. Yet,
still, you remain with me. With
me, but never mine.
... < ... > .... < ... > ...
Yet, you are mine. Yes,
though I own you not, you
are mine. A gift giv'n anew
as each now turns to now.
... < ... > .... < ... > ...
Do I give to all
as freely as you give
to me? Do I share of my
self as openly?
... < ... > .... < ... > ...
You ask for nothing.
Yet you give ev'rything.
How do you always have more?
From where comes your supply?
... < ... > .... < ... > ...
What is that you say?
I give back to you? How?
My life, an offering? My
exhale... my action? Wow..
... < ... > .... < ... > ...
So, you mean to say:
It's a cycle. You give,
I give, in return. My life
feeds you, as you feed me,
... < ... > .... < ... > ...
together, we both
learn, grow, experience
Being. No purpose but Joy,
'Home' nowhere and Now, Here.
... < ... > .... < ... > ...
You are both Ruler
and Servant. Benign and
loving Infinite. Teach me
to live without limit.
... < ... > .... < ... > ...
You come and you go,
yet you never leave me.
Steadfast, I act; one with you.
To you, my breath, I am true.
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Mic drop. This is absolutely STUNNING. I cannot praise this enough, Tony. Holy shit. "What is that you say? I give back to you? How? My life, an offering? My exhale... my action? Wow.. ... < ... > .... < ... > ... So, you mean to say: It's a cycle. You give, I give, in return. My life feeds you, as you feed me, ... < ... > .... < ... > ... together, we both learn, grow, experience Being. No purpose but Joy, 'Home' nowhere and Now, Here." I love the whole thing, but this section is so cool, with the answer that breath gives. Wow wow wow.
This is fantastic. Well done.
I never looked at breath like that but I did look at it another way, when I was on a ventilator. If you have time, please read my "My Time on a Ventilator". Thanks.
I had to include this poem here ❤️✨ It falls perfectly into the theme of appreciation https://shopping-feedback.today/writers/lust-for-words-3%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/span%3E%3C/a%3E%3C/p%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3C/div%3E%3Cdiv class="css-w4qknv-Replies">
This is next level gorgeousness, Tony. An ode to something we take for granted every day – thank you for reminding me to stop and appreciate the very thing that sustains me. I love the cyclic nature of this poem – it's perfect for the subject matter, and really gives that sense of symbioses. "It's a cycle. You give, I give, in return. My life feeds you, as you feed me" So damn beautiful. Thank you. x
Okayyyyy…this is absolute magic! What an incredibly gorgeous experience you created in this piece, Tony! The layers and depth here are just rich with parallels. “Yet, you are mine. Yes, though I own you not, you are mine. A gift giv'n anew as each now turns to now.” 🤦🏽♀️ There are so many treasures in this piece that I’d just be rewriting the entire thing if I shared every line I loved. Beautiful beautiful beautiful work! Just, Woah!
Whoaaaa, this blew my mind! This was breathtaking (see what I did there, lol), extremely deep and thought provoking. You portrayed such a beautiful cycle of life!
Kahlil Gibran would approve of this poem! Phenomenal!
I read this as the story of learning to love truly (letting go of attachment based love and control,). Learning from the relationship with our breath. The magical essence of life, and so too of love. It’s truly outstanding. Great work 🙏❤️✨
There are so many great lines in this, Tony. Outstanding!
That really did take my breath away and give it straight back on a gasp. This was wonderfully done! I especially liked this verse: "Yet, you are mine. Yes, though I own you not, you are mine. A gift giv'n anew as each now turns to now."
Well excuse me if what I'm about to say is a bit obvious, but this was truly breathtaking, Tony! 😍 I found this line so mesmerizing: "You are both Ruler and Servant. Benign and loving Infinite. Teach me to live without limit." Breath is so much more than just air entering our lungs. I am in love with how you expressed this concept. Amazing job! ❤️❤️