As the rock emerged, we swiveled, no fear
From you, a deep breathe, from me a giggle
A joke or two about how you could steer
How the canoe had begun to wiggle
After a moment my heart racing
Fear gone, peace replacing, all I could think
The challenge, the future we are facing
I'm ready I'm on happinesses brink
Then I yell, in confidence and in glee
Let us do it again I am ready
More rocks ahead, and logs I see
No fear because our course is steady
And then a log gets the better of me
water fills the boat, a refreshing bath
all we do is laugh, no problem no rath
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Antoinette L Brey
I am an elder in a time of freedom. I am now retired. All i want to do is have fun. Without a daily routine, my imagination is one of my only salvations. I am not planning on writing a book, it is just for my own pleasure
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