lust for coconuts
for Caroline Jane’s VSS Haiku Honey competition ✨
This sounded like a fun challenge to try. I’ve put the link at the bottom and I hope you will also give it a go!
I spent way, way longer on this than intended and came up with way too many variations….now all I can think about is milky, juicy coconuts…. 😅
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sacred milky juice
sumptuous delicacy
slurped by lustful men
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Just for fun…. Here are some of the others that I didn’t choose.
Let me know if you have a favourite?
Would you have selected the same one I did?
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Sacred milk and flesh
Beneath protective hard shells.
How to tease them out?
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Juicy coconuts
Tantalising man’s desire
Will he be sated?
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flesh, milk, oil, juices,
hidden treasures beneath shell -
- ignite man’s desire
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milky, sticky juice
sumptuous delicacy
from sweet coconuts
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Fleshy coconuts
Tantalising man’s desire
Will he be sated?
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Comments (20)
I love the elevated status you bestowed on coconuts. Sumptuous indeed. Congratulations 🥳
They were all tantalizing! I really want a coconut!!!! I've never thought of a coconut quite this way. Now, I will only think of them this way. They may even replace mangos as my aphrodisiac!
Love this set of haiku , great work
Honestly I like them all Kayleigh - but the one you picked is especially good!
Mmmmm!!! So good! Great take on the challenge, Kayleigh!
Love them all!
All of these are gold, but I do favor your lead one. Great job Kayleigh. Plus the title is bank.
All I can say is that I gotta get my mind out of the gutter, lol! These Haikus were fantastic!
I love that you thought so hard about this. Such a pro!! 😊 The first is perfect!! 🤩
I like number three from the back up list, maybe the best, or maybe the one you chose. Its close.
Loved them all! I was toying between your choice and the last because I really liked the use of the question. But I think you're right-Final decision is the best one 🤍
My desire is to tell you how awesome this is! Great work!
Well done... deliberate double entendre, I presume, in your final selection?? 💙 Anneliese
Hot, sensual, sexy. Love it!
I agree with Lamar. They were all great. But the one you choose has the best effect.
I liked them all. But the one you chose has the best effect in my opinion. Great entry!
Fantastic!!!❤️❤️💕
Amazing!
HOT!!!!!! 🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥 I love them all but I have to say... this one doing it for me. 🤣🤣🥰 flesh, milk, oil, juices, hidden treasures beneath shell - - ignite man’s desire Thanks for participating. You are a superstar!! 💫💫💫💫❤
All that juice. all that juice. This was great, Kayleigh! Great entry for the challenge and I like the one you chose, though, the other options are all fab too!