Loved Down

Ah ha! String, true, have been there! Need the space or time but afraid it will break irrevocably.

Very potent poem… love and confusion.🤔

I can feel pure angst and encroaching indecision in each word of your poem. "Blighted" and distorted, it literally haunts your reader. This is so creative and artfully written.

So well written! 'I don't recognise you in the distortion' I adored that line! And the way it built up to that amazing ending was so masterful.

i sense the complexity of relationships strongly here. And they are difficult! So well-expressed.

Wooft! Definitely felt the tension and pressure of this in the discomfort and ending line of what's at stake. Very well done!

Stunning - short and powerful x

What powerful sentiment in your words.

Painfully honest!

Heartbreaking and yet so beautifully written.

Those words have great power in them, Rachel!

Every word of this is on point. Not one floats untethered to the point. Great job. I especially love the use of the dual meaning of space and breaks.

This is beautifully heartbreaking. Those last two lines especially hit hard.

This was my favourite line and the meanings behind it, “I'm captivated by the glimpse”. 😔

Oof, that hit right in the feels—raw, real, and beautifully bittersweet. You've captured the struggle with such grace!

This is very well done, Rachel! Because it will be the breaking of us is stunning! Great challenge entry!

Very well written! Break ups are so hard, but if someone needs that space it’s important to take it.

Very succinctly stated Rachel. For better or worse, the only constant is change. Sometimes things and even people just change for the worse. When the one we loved is distorted by the stresses of time and tide it can be very difficult. Great job.

It's a shame. It's hard to break up for so many reasons. Sometimes it's just logistics that stop us, and that's okay. I have a difficult relationship with love, I find it hard to write about. Plus, my opinions are not too popular. X

Heyo✨ Let's do a teamwork I like your stories and you gonna like mine 🫶🏻♥️

Ooo a cone where the ice cream has fallen off 👀 After I read the poem I am realising how much I loved the title, the meaning made sense. A breakup poem but in the imagination. The breaking point outlined, but unable to cross to the other side. An almost end, this was just fantastic! 👌🏽👏🏽♥️🤗

Is a relationship that would break if someone needed time and space even worth it? Loved your poem!

Powerful & Well-Written! Go Rachel! 🩷