A place where fading memories float
A residence where I built my paper boat
Rooms where the kid in me was BRIGHT
Shouted into the pillow, when scared, would hide
The plant that I watered every day
The pots that I carved, made with clay
Curtains would make a path to the MOON
The windows reflected light, 'til it was noon
The sky from the yard would tell it's MINE
The stars at night would sing me a rhyme
The universe was happy, and so was I
Why didn't I know life ahead is a LIE?
Now,
All the colors have forgotten to light
World has turned into something black and white
I wish TIME hadn't learnt to run
I wish I'd never seen the morning sun
I wish I'd lived a little more SMALL
The darkness around me, I'm caged in a wall
Sometimes, all I want is a silent QUIT
A world where I don't have to admit
I grew up, and the child in me chose death
The kid in me died; Oh, she lost her breath
That place was my HOME, can't find it now
Was it really a place, or a feeling somehow?
I think I'll forget this WORLD and be gone
To a place that doesn't hurt, where it's all alone
I hate this HOLLOW WORLD and skies
It's full of deceit and full of lies!
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Maryam Batool
I'm 17
I'm a storyteller who loves poems, fiction, and romance. Creativity is my constant companion. I take joy in turning thoughts into worlds. Writing is my way of exploring life and connecting with others
Ready to let my writing bloom!
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Comments (11)
This was sad yet powerful. I wish I'd never seen the morning sun. Gee I hope you're not really feeling this way, Maryam. Well done but very sad indeed!!!
Incredibly written and powerful! I read this out loud like a song, but after "Now..." it naturally sped up like a rap! I can feel the chaos and the pain in your voice. Masterful.
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nice
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Aww this hit hard! I hope the kid in you sneaks back sometimes just to mess with your serious side.💖
so ,deep words . well written. really fantastic.
Ohh! This was very sad. While reading the first stanza, I felt it was about childhood, but later you wrote things with such depth, as if by someone who has experienced life very closely and deeply. And the pain of the child's self fading away. But the child within us never truly dies — it just gets lost. And it can be found again. Along with a harsh reality toward the world, it's true. I hope this is not related to your personal life. This is a great piece, sister!!! "I hate this HOLLOW WORLD and skies It's full of deceit and full of lies!" Incredible!!
Bravo Batool I WISH TIME WOULD COME BACK ON DAY
The world is made up of a huge lie. Everyone has lies in their mouths. When people take lies as the truth, it sounds better instead.
This was so sad 🥺🥺 I hope you're not actually feeling this way. Sending you lots of love and hugs 🥺❤️