i knew a bloke
who had Van Gogh’s Irises
printed on the outside
of his favourite umbrella
he loved that particular painting
he just had
a funny way
of showing it
i loved a girl once
her name was Kim
her hair was so long
straight out of a shampoo ad
and blacker
blacker than my heart
she was always near
she was so close
it physically hurt
and then so very far away
...at times
just across the tiny room
or sitting in my tiny car
or on the tiny couch
passing in the tiny hallway
or in the tiny kitchenette
of the tiny house
we shared.
a good morning smile
polite conversation
a nice 'how was your day'
at the end of the day
see ya tomorrow - yeah
she was engaged
to one of my mates;
Mick and Kim…
Mick knew nothing
no one did
but Kim
she took a look into our future
she knew
the whole time
she knew
and neither of us
ever
said
a
word
just got a funny way
blowing it
a funny way
knowing it
a funny way
throwing it
just got a funny way
a funny way
a funny way
just got a funny way of showing it!
About the Creator
Bren
"It's just a token of my extreme!" - Frank Zappa
"Cause it's all in the heat of the moment It's all in the pain!!!" - Devin Townsend
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That would be a quite awesome song. I would call it ‘Van Gogh’s Irises’. The crowd would scream the last words after the singer :)