I should stop my day-dreaming
Day dreaming wastes your time and a bit of yourself too.
I intended to grow rich
Richer than James Bond!
I fantasized about all, I was ever fond
My wish list- I prepared was dude hell long
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I saw a march, people were with a torch
Words loud, shoulders tight, and deep-set eyes
And I was their King, I ruled over their heads
My dream broke when I opened my eyes losing my flying porche
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I again slept, continued the dream from a lost
This time I met an old wise man, told him about it all
He said, 'You can't see me 'cause I am a delusion'
I'm of no advice but I'll deceive you at any cost
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I woke up again, This time I'll ask that creep!
I slid through my covers and had another sleep
I searched for that man, I searched too well
I found a rusty letter, that said something deep
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It said, " I am delusional, I can make you see the star
You'll see all good and wealth with me -long as you go far!"
I thought to myself, " What was he talking about?"
I got it when I read the end that said, "Just a fool you are!"
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That man was a deceiver and he referred to my dream
He pointed out that I was every day just into that beam
He advised me that I should stop my day-dreaming
Because sun could burn away, all that I'd ever seen
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Author's note:
I think day-dreaming always causes us to lose that ounce of milk in our jar.
_posted another draft (I didn't intend to, but someone wise said: post everything you ever wrote. Hence, I did)
About the Creator
Maryam Batool
I'm 17
I'm a storyteller who loves poems, fiction, and romance. Creativity is my constant companion. I take joy in turning thoughts into worlds. Writing is my way of exploring life and connecting with others
Ready to let my writing bloom!
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Comments (4)
I daydream a lot as well. Such a great story.
Daydreams are good 😊👍 Even when they spiral off to not such a good place. It's a rich seam 😁
Good morning Maryam I imagine I could be your father,s age when I first read one of your works, I found that the work was great and its author had a wide imagination As for my method, it is to spend my time and my luck because it is innate and does not cost me effort and trouble because it has been with me throughout the years of my life. Overall, I applaud you for your wonderful work keep it up, your work is admirable
"Sister, what’s the matter? You have such maturity. Are you just 16-17 years old? I also daydream, but mine are a bit more, much more heavy and vast. Very deep thoughts are amazing. Keep it up with more passion!