semblance of self struck me silently
gazing at the ghostly graven glares,
cold creeps cradles and caresses
my mind is momentarily muted for minutes
or hours, holding me in horror, haunted
breaking the bonds, breaking the banality
little by little, ligaments and limbs lighten
free... will free... free... will frozen
arrogance, aggression, ambivalence, amber
red realisation reluctance then reticence and resignation
as the abyss accepts me, absorbs and absolves me
little by little, ligaments and limbs lighten,
breaking the banality, breaking the bonds
of hours, held in horror, haunted
my mind momentarily muted, for minutes
as the cradling and caressing of the cold creeps clears
and the ghostly graven glares give out
the semblance of self summoned from stillness
present in person and, present in place and point in time
I remain
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"Do It Again" the track that would ultimately open the Beach Boys final album on Capitol Records which was released on February 10th 1969 had originally been released as a single in August of 1968. The track was the first of many post-Pet Sounds era throwbacks to the early Beach Boys sound which would become continually more cliched and eventually lead the Beach Boys to the level of self-parody they would eventually succumb to in the 1980s while their closest contemporaries The Beatles nearing the end of their run in 1969 would go on to be viewed as the most influential band of all time. However, the song itself is not bad on its surface, and it opens with a futuristic sounding (for 1969) drumbeat captured by then-Beach Boys engineer Stephen Desper using tape delays on the drums performed by Dennis Wilson and John Guerin. The song has been re-recorded numerous times over the years on various Beach Boys-related projects most notably the 2011 re-recording at Capitol studios featuring the five surviving Beach Boys at the time backed instrumentally by various members of both the Brian Wilson Band and Mike Loves touring "Beach Boys" to promote the then upcoming Beach Boys 50th Anniversary reunion tour in 2012. The hammering and power drill sound at the end of the song was an excerpt from a track called "Workshop" that was to be a part of the uncompleted "SMiLE" album.
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This alliterative poems are amazing! You capture such an emotional depth with this one—amazing.
"gazing at the ghostly graven glares, " --> so many powerful lines in here <3
Wonderful to read 🍀🍀🍀🍀
Amazing performance poem!!!
Wow, Paul! This is great! I love how there's some mirroring with the beginning and ending lines (paired will with the image too) and of course the alliteration is striking and makes each line its own little gem
Enjoyed the alliteration Mr Stewart!
A masterpiece in alliteration that only you could produce, Paul. Great piece
All I can say is what a great read.
This whole poem is so freaking awesome, but that last line, just WoW!!
And now that silent calm prevails, who am I that remains? I see Ashish hit you, too.
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This is a masterclass in effective alliteration. And the way that last line breaks apart the entire structure feels like a gut punch. There's a depth to this that speaks directly to the soul. This is such an amazing piece of writing. I feel like I could read it ten times over and still find something new. I really hope this gets Top Story so more eyes are on it. This really is something special. You've outdone yourself!
The slow and painful distillation of self. Brilliant, arresting, powerful. You are a survivor, Paul. Well done!
This feels like a hypnotic descent into and then a rise out of the abyss—rhythmic, haunting, and eerily beautiful. Definitely one to sit with for a while.
This is a beautifully written and evocative piece! The imagery is haunting and powerful, particularly the "ghostly graven glares" and the "cold creeps cradling and caressing." The repetition of phrases like "little by little" and "breaking the banality" emphasizes the struggle and the gradual return to presence. The final, simple "I remain" is a powerful statement of resilience and self-possession. It's a captivating and introspective work.👍✨
Oooo, your alliteration is soooo impressive! 🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥 Loved your poem! 🍩🥐
Alliteration abounds all around!