I Lay vague… away
Somewhere between here and there challenge
I shone my eyes on the thing
Like a lightbulb
Cracked and shattered
I stay here on a lane
I’ve paved
Not picking up splinters
I cannot see
Though I wait
The flow of current
Stops
*
I lay vague
Away
Feeling my own
Pulse
Holding back
I am liquid
Weighted under a bottled cap
Tilted
On the wayside
Still choosing fusions
Joining destitution
Why did I pour myself out to become an empty bottle
*
If I knew why
I would not be choosing
To tie a loose string around a mug
Instead of returning the bottle cap
…
Greenery
Overgrown
Makes me an illusion.
Hidden between grass blades
Was I ever there?
Where songs made a beat
And the rhythm
Moved with endless sweep
Where the river
Loops
And no one sees
No one emptied themselves into me
*
Without movement
I reject the spark
I erase the stars
Grounded into loss
Will not bring myself to look further than a feeling
I’ll loop and loop
I’ll lay vague
Away
A/ N I read a poem by Tim, before writing my own. I hope it does not sound similar. But out of love and fear. I will link it below with credits — If by any chance it does, even if it’s a single word or two — My mind overthink things, you know…. Thank you so much for reading if you got this far ♥️🤗🙏🏽
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Nice! Thank you, Tiffany 💖
Yo! First off. Loved this. Reading it felt like being in the ocean, being lulled back and forth. Secondly, this is me selfishly diving into your comments for help. So I apologize for that. Would love for you to read my latest. I am looking for beta readers for a project and would love for you to be part of it if you are interested.
I can really feel your words as I read this. Wonderful job with your writing.
“Why did I pour myself out to become an empty bottle.” A favourite line that feels like me. I see what you wrote to me the other day much clearly. 🤗 hugs 💕
Fantastic entry for this challenge, Caitlin! ⚡💙 Bill⚡
Those opening lines grabbed my attention right away. Then you led us though a trail of words that lingered well after the last one. So glad you found inspiration to write and share this one, Caitlin!
That was beautifully haunting! The “loop and loop” nails how thought patterns keep recycling when clarity is missing. 💖
Really haunting imagery. The bottle and river loops stayed with me. 🌊
"Why did I pour myself out to become an empty bottle" "No one emptied themselves into me" These lines hit me so hard because they were relatable. I'm so sorry you've experienced it too 🥺 Sending you lots of love and hugs ❤️
Caitlin, you have out done yourself with this…..it had better be considered for the challenge. ‘I am liquid Weighted under a bottled cap’ In these words you expressed the feeling of being trapped, and contained. The flow of this is stunning.
I am reading your poem right now with this song playing: Yumeji's Theme by Umebayashi... and my heart is breaking with every line. "I lay vague" - how I know what this feels like intimately. It plucked a string that aches still. "Greenery Overgrown Makes me an illusion." - fading away as life does its thing without us, the grief of the nothingness... masterpiece!
This was so stunning, my goodness. The emotions you evoke are so incredible.