Hoar
An entry for the Frosted Verse challenge
Bareness, once cold, is now leaden,
The stripped trees trembling
As you take them and entomb them.
Let me, you say.
You will be transformed.
Trust me.
What choice do they have?
There is no shield of resistance
As you enrobe,
As you come and come and come.
Arms raised, they are adorned,
Their immobile grace their weakness.
You are brutal and heavy in your touch.
You clutch and encase
With tiny icy spikes.
Starkly, trees glisten as the Sun spots them,
Curiously enquiring of the branches
And the thickened trunks:
"What are you dressed in today?"
Preening, you prostitute yourself
To his weak, misty-eyed attention,
Ice sequins glittering over nature's decline.
Light splays on white, shining
Like torchlight on a marble tomb.
I, the peeper, am charmed too.
Captivated by your presence.
The purity of paleness
Has landed like a suffocating shroud.
You look so good, my eyes dance
And my imagination fizzes
With white; clusters of white;
posturings of white, augmentations
Of white.
And like nature, I have no choice
But to succumb
To the beautiful hoar.


Comments (14)
Imaginative personification. I can believe in this world.
Very well played provocative wordplay! Excellent entry, Rachel!
Great job… addressing the destructiveness of frost despite its beauty ✅.
How mesmerizing and evocative, Rachel. I really love the imagery in your carefully chosen words. Very well done.
Wonderful imagery and a great play on words
This is a beautiful entry. Well done.
This is a spectacular evocation of hoar frost, Rachel! Brilliant entry to the challenge!
Well-wrought! The play on words here is superb, an excellent eidolon of the love/hate relationship we tend to have with winter.
Powerful imagery, awesome poetry...
phwoar! this is just enchanting, chum! love it!
Oh, exquisite. Those trees!
Not me thinking hoar was a fancy way to spell whore 🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣 Loved your poem!
You have frozen the nature of frost in verse, even as you described frost imprisoning the trees. Deftly done!
Frost is beautiful, yet has the power to imprison. Powerful imagery,