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Hoar

An entry for the Frosted Verse challenge

By Rachel DeemingPublished about a year ago Updated about a year ago 1 min read
Hoar
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Bareness, once cold, is now leaden,

The stripped trees trembling

As you take them and entomb them.

Let me, you say.

You will be transformed.

Trust me.

What choice do they have?

There is no shield of resistance

As you enrobe,

As you come and come and come.

Arms raised, they are adorned,

Their immobile grace their weakness.

You are brutal and heavy in your touch.

You clutch and encase

With tiny icy spikes.

Starkly, trees glisten as the Sun spots them,

Curiously enquiring of the branches

And the thickened trunks:

"What are you dressed in today?"

Preening, you prostitute yourself

To his weak, misty-eyed attention,

Ice sequins glittering over nature's decline.

Light splays on white, shining

Like torchlight on a marble tomb.

I, the peeper, am charmed too.

Captivated by your presence.

The purity of paleness

Has landed like a suffocating shroud.

You look so good, my eyes dance

And my imagination fizzes

With white; clusters of white;

posturings of white, augmentations

Of white.

And like nature, I have no choice

But to succumb

To the beautiful hoar.

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Rachel Deeming

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  • Natalie Wilkinsonabout a year ago

    Imaginative personification. I can believe in this world.

  • D.K. Shepardabout a year ago

    Very well played provocative wordplay! Excellent entry, Rachel!

  • Great job… addressing the destructiveness of frost despite its beauty ✅.

  • Cindy Calderabout a year ago

    How mesmerizing and evocative, Rachel. I really love the imagery in your carefully chosen words. Very well done.

  • Sean A.about a year ago

    Wonderful imagery and a great play on words

  • Cathy holmesabout a year ago

    This is a beautiful entry. Well done.

  • John Coxabout a year ago

    This is a spectacular evocation of hoar frost, Rachel! Brilliant entry to the challenge!

  • C. Rommial Butlerabout a year ago

    Well-wrought! The play on words here is superb, an excellent eidolon of the love/hate relationship we tend to have with winter.

  • Michelle Renee Kidwellabout a year ago

    Powerful imagery, awesome poetry...

  • Paul Stewartabout a year ago

    phwoar! this is just enchanting, chum! love it!

  • Hannah Mooreabout a year ago

    Oh, exquisite. Those trees!

  • Not me thinking hoar was a fancy way to spell whore 🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣 Loved your poem!

  • D. J. Reddallabout a year ago

    You have frozen the nature of frost in verse, even as you described frost imprisoning the trees. Deftly done!

  • Michelle Liew Tsui-Linabout a year ago

    Frost is beautiful, yet has the power to imprison. Powerful imagery,

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