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Haunting of Car 17 - The Storm

Part Four - Collaboration with KelliđŸŒč

By Mother CombsPublished 10 months ago ‱ Updated 10 months ago ‱ 1 min read
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Part One by Kelli:

Part Two by me:

Part Three by Kelli:

An electrical storm came late one October night

Filling the chilled air around with a static charge

And blocking the Hunter’s moon’s reflected light

Emitting an eerie, supernatural virulent discharge

Glowing unnaturally, silencing the frightened wildlife

A low vibration begins, accompanied by steady pulsing

An unearthly screech ridden with paranormal strife

The Wraiths lure souls while they demonically sing

Calling to them all who are lost, that they may be prey

The conductor stands watch, always ready to be a guide

To any casualty who has forgotten how to kneel and pray

An army of ghouls, comprised of criminals who died

Waiting for the conductor to pass along the boss’s orders

Satan’s engineer, who led them all to this spectral hell

The crashed train, an eldritch portal to Abaddon’s borders

The only warning, the ghostly sound of the tolling bell

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Part Five by Kelli:

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Mother Combs

Come near, sit a spell, and listen to tales of old as I sit and rock by my fire. I'll serve you some cocoa and cookies as I tell you of the time long gone by when your Greats-greats once lived.

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  1. Excellent storytelling

    Original narrative & well developed characters

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  • Randy Wayne Jellison-Knock10 months ago

    Ask not for whom the bell tolls..., ...no need for you to worry, it tolls for me.

  • Marie381Uk 10 months ago

    I agree please continue this â™ŠïžđŸ™â™Šïž

  • More electricity!!!! ⚡⚡⚡⚡ ⚡😁👍

  • Man, I sure have my work cut out for me! Great work đŸ„°

  • Susan FourtanĂ© 10 months ago

    Also, how cool this is a collaboration. I only did this once, not here, it was fun. You and Kelly perhaps would like to participate in that project. It’s a book. Each chapter written by a different author. I’ll post the details in the Writers community this weekend. đŸŒ·

  • Susan FourtanĂ© 10 months ago

    Yes! It needs to be continued! And I must read the previous parts. I love your art. 😍

  • Oh it sure needs to be continued. I gotta know what happens next!

  • I read Kelli's yesterday and commented that The Haunting here reminds me of Stephen King's Carrie! Cool, gals!

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