From the Cozily Rocking Eastbound Train
a poem

Perhaps this scene,
from the cozily rocking eastbound train,
of the juvenile sleet clouds tentatively stretching their wings,
misty-morning-silver-feathered
over the band of liquid, languid river
carved through the hilly, forested scape of a season's afterthoughts -
Perhaps this scene, which briefly slakes the deep inner ache,
whose favorite costume is wanderlust -
Perhaps this scene need not throw into sharp relief
all the days of ordinary time,
need not cast some pall of insignificance upon
all the other moments
(doldrums, I'm tempted to call them) -
Perhaps this scene could but rather serve as a flare, or beacon,
as worlds outside contemplate turning frail and crystal once more -
Yes, perhaps this scene could be a bastion, holding the truth
that this sublimity hides away,
if only more reservedly,
within every other moment.
Yes, perhaps this scene,
from the cozily rocking eastbound train
might remind me of this
that wonder is waiting everywhere you are willing to look for it,
even
(or especially)
in the seconds of the seasons rushed through, and already fading
out of view of the trembling windows, misty with slow frost
through which I watch and pass all things.
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About the Creator
Gabriel Huizenga
Twas for love of words that I first joined this site:
Poetry, especially, and dear short stories too;
For to live one's best is to read, and to write!
So find me in words here, and I'll find you 💙
Thanks for stopping by! :)
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Comments (8)
Stunning prose, incredible imagery and a wonderful reminder to slow down and observe.
Gorgeous, those last three lines are perfection. An impressionist painting in poetic form. Congrats on top story.
The imagery here is breathtaking your language turns the simple act of looking out a train window into something transcendent.
#teamtrains Congrats on a well deserved top story
Oh, but you do paint such an illustrious picture with your words. Congratulations on a much deserved Top Story.
Great use of repetition and the beauty on display from the windows of long train journeys. They used to be my fave commute when I was in college. Congrats on Top Story!
There is an undefinable quality to how life slows in the long present and prescient moments spent on a train. When I lived in Germany, many of my favorite introspective moments were experienced on them. Wonderful, thought provoking, memory reviving poetry, Gabriel.
Beautiful poem! I loved the repetition.