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Two planets align—
we vanish in autumn mist
raptured in the hush
About the Creator
Pamela Williams
“Suppose I had wings like the dawning day and flew across the ocean. Even then your powerful arm would guide and protect me.”
— Psalm 139:9–10, Contemporary English Version (CEV)
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Comments (10)
The haiku is a magnet. Wow! So beautiful, enviable. We lose ourselves in the unknown of the mist, only to meet the trees when it fades. And to become many voices. Voices of love.😊
The horror of this one comes in for those left behind. Very clever. This one is a slow burn.
The alignment of planets and the hush of autumn mist work together to create a moment suspended in time. Your minimalistic approach gives the poem a quiet, cosmic elegance.
Immediately made me think of an eclipse with that first line, and I like the use of the word "raptured"😊
These words hang in a place that is both haunting and mysterious.
Love the brevity and the way it feels suspended in time! Mysterious and almost cinematic. ✨
This was so very well thought out Pamela. I like how deep you went. Especially when it came to thinking about what the title should be. The two planets align as a signal to be raptured. Shows a mystery the human mind cannot understand. Within the autumn mist creates a lack of control, a lack of sight. Which instills fear. Fantastic work here 🤗❤️
Oooo, that cover pic and your poem complement each other so well. Loved it!
Such a great haiku, Pamela, and that image is so good it feels real!
Oh, Pamela! This is SO good. That turn at the end...immaculate.