Field of vision
Waking to our dream
It's like this:
After a long climb, calves aching,
we finally reach the upper deck
and step through the arch
into another world --
the green field spread below us
like the prologue of a new book,
the geometry of a story to come;
the hum of leisurely bustle,
the wheat-field undulation
of bodies stirred
by the same breezy dream,
all immersed in endless sky,
a gentle blue ocean
that will glide us into purple majesty
and secret stars.
It is our world,
our story,
our passage into a time
unknown yet already beloved.
Beloved,
this is what it is like
to wake to a new day
beside you.
About the Creator
Sonia Heidi Unruh
I love: my husband and children; all who claim me as family or friend; the first bite of chocolate; the last blue before sunset; solving puzzles; stroking cats; finding myself by writing; losing myself in reading; the Creator who is love.
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The double speak here is gorgeous. Poetic speech is so hard to achieve sometimes, but I find it hits me hardest when the verses are referring to two separate ideas and making them overlap. Yet, it isn’t heavy handed at all here; the image helps focus the words, but it would still be a beautiful poem without it and not lose its meaning. “The geometry of a story to come” “The wheat field undulation of bodies stirred by the same breezy dream” —both related to baseball, yet independent of the sport, paint a picturesque scene of bliss somewhere whimsical. Just gorgeoussss. So well done. And of course the ending, without it, the anchor is gone. ❤️❤️❤️
I must admit the only thing I ever really liked about going to a baseball game was sharing the beautiful day (and a beer and a dog) with those I love. You captured that very well here! The syllabic arrangement in the last four lines was especially nice!
very moving
I love the way this flows. Exceptional writing and the ending was perfect. You just got a new subscriber.
a soft dreamlike love. very well done :)
very well closed, congrats..
Very moving piece! I am subscribing to you so I can read more of your work.
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great writing skills you have. 💖🌸✨
Gorgeous! So well done ❤️
Beautiful, Sonia.
An excellent job of introspective with art, nature and creative way to express a story about a ball game and being next to someone you dearly love ❤️ congratulations 🎉 on top story
Congratulations 💖🎉✨
Wonderful words and congratulations on your Top Story
Beautiful piece. Congrats on the TS
Subscribed! This is so beautiful.
Absolutely beautiful and inspiring! Each little description full of magic. Love this, Sonia!
What a gift, to be able to see so much & so far before you with the one you love.
Simply beautiful!
I really did not see the ending coming and I love it! It really took on a whole new level of meaning the second time reading through ❤️ beautiful!!