Hide my truth out of sight,
Let the day wait before those common gorse
Your face of trust without a ring
I never said… I hated him
Tender moments taken on his phone
So that when he leaves the door will hold
*
Come age and beauty… for time will hold
Nothing changed, in your mind, to change then; your sight
To be… just a picture in his phone
Come, let’s hide behind the common gorse
Am I just another child to him?
Will a child come forth without a ring?
*
Pillow talks, despise the ring,
So that patience became the thing to hold
But I won’t tell you to leave him
He’s the only thing that blocks your sight
Not the pictures near the common gorse
That lay in wait inside his phone
*
Are you a home more than his phone?
A rounded stomach to carve a ring
Stay. Watch it grow like the common gorse
So the child will have someone to hold
Life is hard without an end in sight
I fear the soaring rage, I fought for him
*
It’s eyes, ears and tears will wait on him
Not pixels, swipe right and dates on your phone
Don’t be the reason your child loses sight
When mommy enters without a ring
hardened heart becomes a thing to hold
will not be softened by the common gorse
*
Consternation at the common gorse
I fear for you, I fear for him
There’s no one else, for us to hold
When we are gone, right from his phone
Too late now, for that rounded ring
Bed of pain, a well of sorrow, gone from sight
*
Empty heart inside an empty phone
Determined mind, towards a better him … for him
I hope his past will let grow, conscience… in … his sight
A/N: Thank you so much for stopping by. I used this poem, as a sort of template, so to speak. Sestina by Elizabeth Bishop. Thank you for reading if you got this far. Oh, and this poem — the words, topic, emotions, IS true to what I am going through.
Not as smooth as I would like it to be, but publishing anyway. I am also, so very sleepy. ♥️🙏🏽🤗
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Comments (15)
Absolutely heartbreaking and beautifully written. The emotions in every stanza cut deep — love, loss, betrayal, and the quiet strength of someone holding on. The repetition of those powerful end-words made it even more haunting. Your vulnerability shows, and it takes courage to share pain this raw. Thank you for trusting us with your truth. 🖤
Such a strong and insightful perspective, on a tough situation and strong feelings. Excellent poem.
Perspectives are moulded, sometimes wrongly, by the people around us. So it takes some will to counter that! Not easy to do!
"He’s the only thing that blocks your sight" I feel this sentence so much. You reminded me of an old self with your words, someone I've forgotten. Her view often got blocked by the man standing in front of her. I actually felt like your poem was smooth in a sense, but not smooth like candy floss but like a forgotten path where you just flow without noticing time passing, because you know the way so well.
This is a poem that brings understanding to what and how one can help oneself and others at the same time. This is a helping poem.
Beautiful pathos.
Lots of raw emotion here, I can feel the sense of betrayed and disappointed expectation. Wishing you well Caitlin
This is heartbreaking, Caitlin, and beautifully written. I’m sorry you are experiencing such a difficult time. Please stay strong and find your way through it! Best wishes!
This is beautiful. Thank you for sharing something so vulnerable with us.
I'm so sorry for the pain you're feeling ❤️ This is such an emotion-packed piece (and of course it's well written because you wrote it). I hope life improves for you very very soon. Just know you are worth so much in this weird world of ours, Caitlin ❤️
I feel you executed this so brilliantly. Sending you lots of love and hugs 🥺❤️
A great effort, Caitlin. These complex forms are not as easy as they look, but you still did it.
This is so beautifully done and sad at the same time.
Hey girlie I've missed you on here. I'm sorry to hear about the heartache that you have been experiencing. Sending a big hug your way and prayers of comfort up 4. Take it easy Sweetpea! 🫶🏾🌸
A very difficult form to use. Good work!