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History dissolved.
rusted-gold children
stripped from adoring limbs... a
mother lies in wait
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Lamar Wiggins
Creative writer in the Northeast US who loves the paranormal, mystery, true crime, horror, humor, fantasy and poetry.
"Life is Love Experienced" -LW
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By Shirley Belk6 days ago in Fiction
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Such a short piece, yet it carries deep sorrow. I could feel the weight of history fading in just a few lines.
Simply lovely.
Beautifully written. You can almost feel the leaves falling with the way that you separate the āaā from the rest of the second line. Well done.
Well-wrought! The earth receives us all again in some way, with the stars as witness to our fall.
Oh my that's such a nice photo choice. Especially since the subject is far away, but still looks like the main focus. I do really really like that the leaves are considered, children, that are rusted gold. That they are stripped after they adorned the branches. Mother earth...or the mother tree waits until the leaves breath it's last under her. I love the last line. It's such a beautiful way to end this haiku. Beautiful yet sad. šš¾š¤ā¤ļø
Very earthy. Full of nurturance.
Moms are also waiting for their children no matter what kind of mom they may be. In this case Mom is the earth waiting for the leaves to fall and give nourishment to the earth. Good job and I think I read too much into this one.
Both sad and yet hopeful, well done
oh my. This is incredible. Great job, my friend.
Oh wow, when you put it that way, it sure seems sad. Loved your Haiku!
Excellent idea and execution. It's a really good poem, Lamar
Aww I felt this one deep in my heart! Stunning work! BRAVO Lamar! šŖš¾š
So haunting yet beautiful š
Very unique take on the challenge. I like it.