
i've been driving
down the freeway
with my eyes screwed closed
one hundred kilometres or more an hour
with my eyes screwed closed
for ten seconds or more
my hands were like steel
stuck fast to the wheel
with my eyes screwed closed
my car doesn’t shimmy
her path; fast and true
before i lose all my nerve
the road begins to curve
and i know this
even with my eyes screwed closed
and still i've got my eyes shut
still i got my eyes screwed closed
this is it i suppose
with my eyes closed
i’m slowly going faster
caught up
in this game
this game of disaster
that i’m playing
with my eyes closed
i feel invincible
i know i’m not
i feel unbeatable
full of piss and vinegar
and still my eyes closed
i can almost feel the hand of doom
i hit the curve it’s too late to swerve
it’s way too late to hit the brakes
into the bend
…
i open my eyes
i realise
it’s no surprise,
i open them in time
to see my end
About the Creator
Bren
"It's just a token of my extreme!" - Frank Zappa
"Cause it's all in the heat of the moment It's all in the pain!!!" - Devin Townsend
Centre Stage with the wonderful Heather Hubler
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Comments (4)
Oof, this hit me so hard! It was so relatable! I've been there!
I drove myself beginning to end … with my eyes always open Each thought raced to it’s inevitability… with my eyes alway open Each moment viscerally felt and seen.. with my eyes always open Gripped, caught in a driven frenzy… with my eyes always open Because I couldn’t close them until the chauffeur this ride didn’t end…only then did my minds eye close
Nicely done
Great ending and an excellent poem. Have been there, but not at the end