Photo by Masaaki Komori on Unsplash
Amber fire drifts low,
caught in the hush of cold wind,
one breath, then it’s gone.
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Tim Carmichael
Tim is an Appalachian poet and cookbook author. He writes about rural life, family, and the places he grew up around. His poetry and essays have appeared in Bloodroot and Coal Dust, his latest book.
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Beautifully penned! You nailed the prompt perfectly.
Beautifully captured the feeling of fall
You captured the fleeting moment so perfectly! Loved your Haiku!
Beautifully perfect. Most impressive is the emphasis you add by the use of a kireji, cutting word, “breath” completely and seamlessly changes the direction of the haiku. Masterfully executed.
On a roll!! 🥳
This is YOUR challenge Tim! Stunning work my friend! 💪🏾🎉
Oooh, this is great. Percecty conveys the impermanence of autumn’s beauty, which makes the fleeting beauty itself all the more precious. Great picture choice too, really fits your haiku even from the first line
A lovely moment of magic with the amber drifts. I like the idea of the leaves being like a fire being put out by the wind. Fantastic work here Tim, best of luck on the challenge 🤗❤️
beautiful, you capture the warmth the trees bring to autumn.
Perfect haiku and picture to go with it
"Amber fire" is a very pretty description for autumn leaves. Lovely poem.