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spiderweb compass
hailing the vanilla mould
of your blackened heart
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Cathy holmes
Canadian family girl with a recently discovered love for writing. Other loves include animals and sports.
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Comments (24)
Congratulations on third place in Poppy’s March Prompts… amazing work fitting all 5 prompts into three meaningful lines.
Congrats on placing in Poppy's challenge! Great piece using all the words in 3 lines!!
Wow...so powerful for a senyru. Well bloody done, buddy!
Wonderful story 👏👏👏
Beautiful imagery and combination of words.
Damn this was good though! Fitting those words in a haiku was wonderful! I love the tone of it!
I'm coming across a lot of compasses! I love its combination with spiderweb here.
OOOOO Bloody brilliant! 🤍 Love the image of the spider web compass...can see the little spider shuffling around it as the direction of the lies change and shift.
FABULOUS!
Hard hitting
Omggggg! You are so freaking brilliant! 5 words from Poppy and 5 added words, you created such a poignant yet powerful Senryu! I loved it!
So beautifully sparse! Yet so powerful!
oooh This gave me the chills
Amazing… to use the five word prompts to such effect!
Excellent take on the challenge!
Queen of Senryu ❤️🥲
Awesome!!! Profoundly perfect!!!💕♥️♥️
Ooooooh, this is sharp, Cathy. Fantastic take on Poppy's prompt. 💓
Excellent. John's analysis was spot on, I think. I'm off now to have a look at the prompt but regardless of knowing, this was good.
Spider web of dreams and vanilla mold is a beautiful poem
Ooo, I loved 'vanilla mould' that was such a cool phrase!!!
Nice, Cathy. I don't know if I can beat that
Wow! You managed to use all of the words in Poppy’s prompt for your Senyru. Spiderweb compass (liable to mislead - hence deception?), hailing (warning/highlighting?), vanilla mould (sweet smelling corruption?), blackened heart (speaks for itself). Very thought provoking and potent imagery. Well done, Cathy!
Whoa! That’s pretty deep and vivid. Nice work, Cathy!