How can it be, that
your heart is carved from ice, when
all you breathe is fire?
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How can you say, that
you are flooded with truth, when
all you rain are lies?
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How do you believe
we’ve sown the seeds of love, when
your sprouts are poison?
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You ask how we died.
I ran out of breath, my dear.
It’s elemental.
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Cathy holmes
Canadian family girl with a recently discovered love for writing. Other loves include animals and sports.
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Comments (37)
How the effing jeffing bezos did I miss this bonfire of emotion? this is incredible, Cathy. As usual you find new ways to blow me the hell away, well done on this buddy!
This is powerfully and brilliantly written. I couldn’t pick one line to highlight. I have to say the entire poem is spot on!
Wow! This is pure genius. I wasn't around for this challenge, or I would have predicted a win for you.
The last stanza is splendid!!!
Ooh, I like how this builds and the structure. I love that snappy ending too. 👏
Cathy Holmes, I like the Tone which is spoken 😉❤️💯📝👍💥
Wow! That was incredible.
Lovely!
Excellent piece and a chance of another Challenge win methinks.
Why I do believe you have the hang of this Haiku thingy. Always fun to read your work
Ooh so good! I love the juxtaposition of each piece, riveting!
Beautiful. Powerful. Evocative. Love it, Cathy!
Beautiful.
This is hauntingly beautiful Cathy! 🤍
Your structural repetition works really well, Cathy. The question/answer in. All four - slightly different with the "statement" question in the final summation. Smooth. Intelligent.
Love how you crafted this! The words and sentiments just flow...
Holy shit this is incredible
You are so good Cathy, you make it look easy
Wow I stand my ground — you are the Haiku Queen 🙇♀️🙇♀️🙇♀️
WOW, this blew me away. Gorgeous, layered, and full of meaning. This one will be sticking with me for a while. Thank you for writing and sharing this piece. ❤️
You have such a way with rhythm in your writing!
I have to say, this one blew...the socks right off my feet. Great job with the prompt.
I now feel horrible about my plants that died because of my miserable green thumb- lol. Seriously though this poem is excellent with so much said . Love it - it is elemental ❤️
I like how this carries the reader through the emotions of love.
O M G!! You've got me again Holmes with a literary punch in the stomach... The power of the punch from such an economy words - mind blowing and well... elemental. Here here dear friend!