Crime scene Pantoum
Calling all poetry lovers!! Dark, revengeful… I’ve said enough.
He pulled me apart from my broken mind
My body became a crime scene, and I took flight
I signalled for help, but you were blind
You chose me as your flower while you were blight
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My body became a crime scene, and I took flight
You went into her bed, I died
You chose me as your flower while you were blight
You crave freedom, access denied
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You went into her bed, I died
My heart grew colder than the snow
You crave freedom, access denied
I have secrets that you don’t know
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My heart grew colder than the snow
Now you will never be enough
I have secrets that you don’t know
I won’t be there when times are rough
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My heart grew colder than the snow
I don’t check your phone anymore
I won’t be there when times are rough
No longer home, a caracore
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The good in me is not in them
But now you’ve lost more than a gem
You wanted them, as broken stem
And now you see them as like phlegm
A/N Thank you so much for reading ♥️🤗🙏🏽
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this is very powerful, Caitlin! I have never tried that poetry style before, is it difficult? another great piece of writing by you!
Wow, heartbreaking but yet powerful! Love it!
Stunning writing CC! I hope all is well... I've missed you! Hugs 2 you my friend.
Good job and a poem of a different kind that shows grit.
Oh gosh, I love the tones and themes in this so much, Caitlin! Stunning. Gripping and powerful. Really love the flow and rhyme as well :)
Woaaa! This poem is a raw, powerful journey! You've got that blend of emotional intensity and poetic rhythm that keeps the tension alive from start to finish. The imagery is sharp, and the way you capture that feeling of cold, calculated distance really hits hard. ✨ It’s got this fierce energy that makes it impossible to look away. Incredible work!🤗💖
The scenes you describe are very strong, I like the way you used the idea of the flower and how you constructed the rhymes, very interesting and original poem!
Girl this is solid! I especially loved the line about choosing a flower when you're blight. It hit so good! Great job!
Interesting format, I’ve never seen that before :) Well done. The relation really worked, not only for emphasis by to give the poem a dynamic sense of flow. Also, I had never heard of a caracore either, but now that I’ve googled it, that’s a powerful image
Your poem is hauntingly beautiful and deeply evocative.Your words resonate with raw honesty and vulnerability, making it a compelling and impactful piece
I love the rhyming pattern; it's very unusual. The poem also tells your story well. Definitely a downhill run, in a good way from a story perspective.
I hope this isn't based on your personal experience 🥺 Your poem was so heartbreaking. I loved it!
What a picture you have drawn/written. Good job.
Powerful, raw emotions expressed through vivid, haunting imagery.
This poem powerfully captures the painful transformation from love to cold detachment, with raw emotion and striking imagery ✨❤
Great poetry!
This is so deep! ✨
Nice work on this one