Cold Shoulders of Silence
A Moment of Silence Acrostic Challenge Entry.
By Paul StewartPublished about a year ago • 1 min read
shoulders drop, she turns away
I...
loneliness - hers, quietens
empty words, full of decay
no future, as the walls.. our walls
crumble to dust
everything's lost, she turns away
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Author's Notes: Break-up after silence falls.
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Comments (20)
That last line was heartwrenching. SO evocative
Oh, my heart. THAT "I..." hit me straight in the feelers. Brilliant job evoking so much emotion here, pal! Well done on telling a huge story. Now, for a different ending that doesn't hurt so bad! :)
Nooooo she can't do that, too sad, make her not do that!
What a sad scene and emotionally packed piece!! Very well done, Paul!
Agreed on the dangling I that Heather identified- it works really well on its own. The pause perfectly sums it up. I wondered if anyone would go for the breakup conversation route! “ loneliness - hers, quietens” is a great line Paul.
Just brilliant. Like an eighties' ballad.
Short to the point and very powerful the emotions really came through on this one
Ouch... that is a familiar silence indeed!! Reminds me of one of your poems I read today that broke my heart... Do you recall "Notice, Cared" from your book??
Your title gave me a good scare because I thought we wrote about the same thing. After reading your poem, I realised it's different and feel so relieved now because I never would want anyone to think that I stole your idea hahahaha. Anyway, loved your poem, Sir Paul! 🍩🥐
Woah! This is a seriously sad acrostic! Definitely a contrarian and original take on the challenge! Great work, Paul!
you manged to evoke the pain of seperation and loss so well.
Such a sad moment captured. Well done, Paul!
Too somber for me though. Good work though.
I love this! What a great use of the challenge! Just a snippet of a moment. Lovely.
Brutal 😞 Great entry!
I agree with the dangling I. It give a visual to her turning away. Excellent job, Buddy
Repeating Heather’s comment-
That dangling ‘I’ was so powerful. Really well done :)
This is brilliant, so evocative.
Well, that hurt... 😔 😟 🙁 😥