Broken door
First time putting a hard lesson into words.
A bottle full, leaves you empty.
A bottle empty, leaves you full-
of hateful codependency,
A reliance writhed so heftily.
Who but numbing remedies,
surmounts your hard earned confidence.
Assurance failed with depleted words,
circling about your obscure properties.
To tend, to nurture and to fill-
fill your soiled cup.
To spill mine into yours,
until we both have nil.
You aren’t to blame, though once aggrieved,
I see your hurting heart.
It was that awful night, cold frosted panes,
Where your anguish was best perceived.
You called me home, Distraught and contrite.
I stressed wheels on ice, impotent and weary.
The door was locked I knocked and knocked-
Panicked and uptight.
I cared not for a broken door,
but your body lying sore.
Near unconscious to your core,
you wished a pill did more,
More take more,
More, until there is no more left-
inside you, sickness strangling you.
I cared not for a broken door,
but your body lying sore.
Near unconscious to your core,
wishing I did more.
About the Creator
Hyde Wunderli
Enthusiast of gothic romanticism and strong themes.
Here for the dopamine, the passion, and the challenge to push my comfort zone.
Reader insights
Outstanding
Excellent work. Looking forward to reading more!
Top insights
Heartfelt and relatable
The story invoked strong personal emotions
On-point and relevant
Writing reflected the title & theme



Comments (10)
Whoa!!! This was tragic. I felt it all. Great poem and congrats on a TS!
congrats on the TS
So many have had experiences like this - congratulations on TW! 🎉🥳
That was some powerful story, Hyde. The rhyme made your desperation so apparent, like it was ramped up and futile, nowhere to go.
Well that left me just shattered and kind of speechless... simply beautiful way of capturing grief and loss! Great work Hyde and congrats on Top Story!
Brilliantly written. ❤️
I hope this isn't true and if it is I am much more saddened than the "core" of this very intense poetic expression. Your ability to capture grief and alcohol and drug abuse was unbelievably perfect.
What a powerful conclusion! Congrats on Top Story!
What a powerful and poignant poem. Congratulations on your Top Story. Well done.
So profound