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Broch

For Penny Fuller's A-Z Challenge, Part B

By Mackenzie DavisPublished about a year ago Updated 2 months ago 2 min read
Broch
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Broch: luminous ring around the moon.

Backstory: I remember being a small girl and staring at the slightly illuminated dark part of an incomplete moon. I was fascinated, didn’t understand how it could be. It's still my favorite part of pedestrian moon-sighting, if visible.

I have many thoughts about the moon. I think the luminous glow, however, is not the one associated with eclipses, but the more common glow that comes with a thicker air, like fog. This, too, is captivating, especially in the fall heading toward Halloween, but even after, toward winter. A kind of eerie mood is set, and one can feel the draw of the celestial body, like the ocean tides.

A broch is a ring around the entire moon, whether it be a full moon or not (as I understand the term). I also learned that a “broch” is a ruin of a circular stone tower—namely with both an inner and outer wall— found in northern Scotland. The word is a Scots word, and connected to “brooch.” I feel like the extra “o” in the latter is a signifier of a brooch being a fancier stone-creation. How does it connect to a luminous ring around a celestial body? My thinking is that the tower’s outer wall is like the moon’s ring, especially if one imagines being at a bird’s eye view.

Now there’s a poetic image.

                    

My Poem

Broch

Glow in a far off desert

the stars of a biting heat, bitter

to the world.

I see rings,

rings on severed fingers, off

in sanded blood;

rings of fire

etched like warpaint

on the inside part of unwatching eyes,

Rings and shockwaves, heat, heat, heat.

                 

Of the bereft, I hear rings

of cries, of terror, of screams,

                       

And do I need a gift of prophecy

to tell it like this, here

when this first chapter has yet to conclude?

Perhaps.

Yet some might call it history.

And if I need fear to care,

simply take me out at night

and wrap me up

lift my watching eyes

to twinkling blue-red stars, like flags

of my now fallen country,

and show me the moon.

               

That halo,

an ever-clearing irony.

               

                

                     

A/N: I wrote this for Penny Fuller's A-Z Challenge, Part B. I'm sure I missed the deadline by that much. But here's the link if anyone wants to join in the next letter!

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About the Creator

Mackenzie Davis

“When you are describing a shape, or sound, or tint, don’t state the matter plainly, but put it in a hint. And learn to look at all things with a sort of mental squint.” Lewis Carroll

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  • Poppy about a year ago

    Gorgeous poem as always🩵

  • Testabout a year ago

    well done

  • Congratulations on your win 🏆.

  • Testabout a year ago

    The softness and calmness of the moon, may it soothe the wounds. The love of the night sky may erase the annoying memories. May uncertainty leave and a new air of optimism come. All the old and all the new may become towers and moons of joy, of freedom and love.

  • Fascinating read about a fascinating word!

  • Testabout a year ago

    Poetic magic indeed!! Beautiful work Mackenzie!! I loved the stream of consciousness feel to this and how each thought just flowed together!

  • D.K. Shepardabout a year ago

    Woah! Stunning piece, Mackenzie! So much raw and jarring imagery delivered so beautifully

  • Alexander McEvoyabout a year ago

    That was amazing! I didn’t expect the skillful depiction of battle you created for us, Mackenzie!!! It was visceral, vibrant, and beautifully poetic!! Amazing work and that was a lovely story you shared with us! Thank you so much for sharing :)

  • Hannah Mooreabout a year ago

    I was not expecting such violence in the poem from the relationship part.

  • Moe Radosevichabout a year ago

    I’m ringing the bell for this one my friend, love it 😊😊

  • Cathy holmesabout a year ago

    This is a gorgeous piece. Well done.

  • Shirley Belkabout a year ago

    The thought of a fallen country is so devastating to me. So sorry

  • Oh wow, that was so intense and beautifully written! Loved it!

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