Blue Base of a Flame: Sonnet
I woke Shakespeare up from the dead. Not my best confession yet, but I needed some help. Rarely am I ever impressed by my own words… So it’s a little spicy 🌶️😳. Not too much so you’re still welcome if you dare. The ornaments around the words, was in reaction to Mother Combs second to latest published piece, ‘plagiarists’. This is for: The Sonnets of Shadows challenge
:: 🕯️🩵©️My lover is the blue base of a flame ©️🩷🕯️
©️Shadows know my needs, but he does not see ©️
:: © If money will lose, then what was his game? ©️
If fear be failure, then what else are we?©️
I've seen men more dapper, with pugs more tame
::🩵 ©️But no such pleasures, felt I, when he leads©️
Eyes on pure diamonds, of all, more thrilling
::So in his arms, this hope speaks poisoned weed
By the sieve of his mind kept I, still yearn
©️A devil in nice cars and flashing lights ©️🩵
I struck a face of red with subtle stern
🩵My lover, a shrimp — stilts — he walks in height
Like a sepal, I held him in my praise
©️🩷His eyes like sunrise, I molten not blaze 🩵 ©️
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I like the irony played out in the last two lines, Caitlin. And the modern feel of this as well. I'm putting it up in the Raise Your Voice thread.
Great entry for the challenge. Good luck!
I love this part "my lover, a shrimp". You gave us some interesting metaphors, I wish I could come up with such pairings. Great work, Caitlin! 🖤
Wonderful writing
I find this fascinating. The allure and neglect are complex. And the symbols seem like beautiful guides. I'm still reading and don't feel qualified to comment, to be honest. But I will say it feels like an unsettling relationship, possibly an emotional entanglement with a narcissist.
Sensational writing CC! ☺️
I especially loved “ I've seen men more dapper, with pugs more tame” Sassy, my lovely! I feel like this is the kind of insult I’d like to sling around 😂 Perfect sonnet!
This sonnet had a nice rhythm and great message in it, Caitlin!
I've been re-reading this all morning, letting the words seep in and dance around my mind. I love the classical feel married with unconventional imagery. Everyone compares love to fire, but you chose the blue base of the flame. The hottest part, the piece that catches your eye and holds your attention, mesmerized. And blue, traditionally associated with cold but here represents heat. Duplicitous by nature. Hmmmm. This was my favorite line: "Shadows know my needs, but he does not see" Beautifully written.
You nailed this sonnet. The rhyme is spot on, and your words are amazing!
This seems to be quite a visual poem. Good job.
Your imagery is so vivid, especially the flame and sunrise lines.
"Like a sepal, I held him in my praise ©️🩷His eyes like sunrise, I molten not blaze 🩵 ©️" Omgggg Caitlin, I'm soooo in love with these lines, especially holding him in your praise like a sepal. That was so beautiful, poetic, and brilliant! Loved your poem so much!
Applause, curtain drops. fuck, this was fantastic and dripping oozing with passion and tinged with heartbreak! the Bard would be impressed and proud! loved the cadence-meant to be recited! the language, the imagery! the mix of the more classic peppered with modern sprinkling! impressive seems like a shit word tbh! well done, Caitlin! wanna know a secret?? ive avoided writing a sonnet ssince i joined Vocal! I will be entering but am petrified, so thank you, cos I am sure this will place and feel im already out of my league!
If you are not impressed by this I am . Cheers to the Blue flame 😁💙