you make it so easy
to dislike you sometimes
perhaps that's what you want
cause i could never hate you
although a number of times
you've really shit me to tears
i've had enough of your crap
i'm fuckin chockas alright?
and you're only nice
when you want something
and even there are barbs
attached to the strings
you cast out pendulously
knowing you'll get a bite
they hook right under the skin
they pull stressed flesh tautly
they pierce through the layers
you make it so easy
to not want to be with at times
you don't like being wrong
you don’t like not being heard
always have an addendum
gotta have the last word
so selfish and greedy
so clingy and needy
mucked up and fucked up
damn they done a number on you
but it’s better to have messed up
than to have had nothing
your petulant storms
your stupid silences
your shit timing
stupid conformity can be an emotion
About the Creator
Bren
"It's just a token of my extreme!" - Frank Zappa
"Cause it's all in the heat of the moment It's all in the pain!!!" - Devin Townsend
Centre Stage with the wonderful Heather Hubler
I'm writing it out not acting in doubt!
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A Dart at Dusk
Seconds ago, the sullen sun set on the two of us… my exuberant furry companion and me. A fresh breeze embraces us, delivering welcome relief from the day’s oppressive heat. His typical stumbling and staggering along — apace with a sloth — has turned into trip-trapping, high-stepping, almost skipping along.
By Angie the Archivist 📚🪶4 days ago in Petlife
Comments (5)
😳 Though I feel this could be about a number of people, I feel called out, LOL. It sounds like a list women would hear from their partners, things that I've definitely heard from my husband...Damn. The imagery of the the strings was *amazing.* One of my favorite extended metaphors, I think. 💜💯
I need to sit with this a bit longer, it stings
Barbs attached to the strings is so painfully relatable! Awesome poem!
🔥 🔥 Fiery work - love it! Also the wit of the addendum reference made me laugh. I feel like we know many of these people. 😁
Nothing like settling I’m guess…Lol. Interesting work Brenton. so…, who is she? Regardless, I think many of us can identify with this one.