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A Comment's Been Promised

A Comment's Been Made

By Thavien YliasterPublished 3 years ago 1 min read
A Comment's Been Promised
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Upon what I've seen

A Self-Caring Queen

In luxury she bathes

Leaving no waves

In the tub that she fills

Her look gives one chills

And a thirst

Of her first

Words to drink

As we relish to think

That beauty is more

Than what's skin deep, or lying on the shore

Of what we can see

Of what is let free

There's much hidden from view

Letting the imagination run wild, letting it brew

And ruminate on what could there

On what one will share

The bath is no trouble

But there are no bubbles

A smooth base of milk

Skin made softer than silk

Can bring in an audience

Writings of opulence

Writing here, on a list

Of riches she won't miss

Filled to the brim

Of her chalice

She speaks with no malice

Yet a jewel, like herself, must have her own palace

Takes care of herself, so she is not callous

The image is simple

A smile, a dimple

Elegance, there's no lack

Her eyes do make contact

Gaze locked with gaze

A picture last for days

Confidence, beauty, modesty

Displayed

"The Whole World's A Stage"

In comments we comment, one that we engage

So let's see, rephrase

Inspect the words' phrase

From gold to velvet and even the opal

Embraced in porcelain, bathed in a boatful

Of indulgent self-care from her head to her thighs

Below the surface, from her toes to her eyes

Imagery and Words is the path that you take

Enchanting the world, let your words now take Shape

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Author's Notes: Please go read "Bubble Bath Queen" by NikkiDeeFit | Nicole Danielle DeFelice. It was her poetic imagery and words that have inspired mine. Her link is embed above.

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Thavien Yliaster

Thank You for stopping by. Please, make yourself comfortable. I'm a novice poet, fiction writer, and dream journalist.

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  • Nicole Oliver2 years ago

    Thank you so much for sharing & for your beautiful response poem! I absolutely love it! :)

  • Such a gorgeous poem! It's so wholesome to see how Nicole's poem inspired you to write this beauty! I loved your poem so much!

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