Two doors are better then Nun- part un
She'll have Nun of it
There was only one rule: don’t open the door, and the world shall remain safe. However, three unlikely occurrences happened.
A Nun, a mouse, and an inquisitive child.
The-nun
Due to an outbreak with-in the orphanage an unqualified nun was tasked with a vital job. Standing before the forbidden door sister Helena glanced furtively about, quickly fumbling within her frock. When her hand withdrew they were shaking, gripping an old-style skeleton key, which she plunged into the lock. In seconds she was through the door. Having only been in this room once before; she was frightened then, now she is terrified. Overwhelmed by the large room full of shelves lined with ancient tablets, runes, scrolls and relics. All collecting dust, all had value, and powers. Why these were kept at the orphanage was a mystery to her. Her goal lay in the far corner of the room. Proceeding, until she stood in front of an ancient duru. Quickly checking the seals for any signs of leakage or cracks. It seemed sealed. Wanting nothing more to do with this, she quickly exited. Praying aloud that the forces locked inside may never again, gain access into the domain of man. Her sect has been guarding the secret of what lay within for over a thousand years.
The-mouse
In her haste and fear Sister Helena failed to notice a tiny, frightened mouse skirt between her legs, bumping the door just enough to keep it ajar.
The-child
Watches the mouse he was chasing, run into the forbidden room as the Sister flees. Curiosity wins over fear, so he enters. Instantly his eyes lock onto an ancient door at the far end of the room, which now has a beam of light piercing outward through a crack in the seal. The child smiles.
About the Creator
JBaz
I have enjoyed writing for most of my life, never professionally.
I wish to now share my stories with others, lets see where it goes.
Born and raised on the Canadian Prairies, I currently reside on the West Coast. I call both places home.


Comments (17)
This is amazing! Off to read the other one now!
I’m glad this says Part Un, because I need a part Deux!
I read the second one first and I'm still intrigued! You're onto something here!
love this piece
Oooo, if you decide to continue this, would you kill the child for me? Lol. Loved your story, especially the little mouse hehehehe
Wow, great piece!
Ut oh! Great work leading us to the edge of the abyss for a peek! Great challenge entry! If you decide to write a sequel, I know I won't complain!
I like the way you set the scene. Each step increased the tension. Good luck, Jason!
I love the shifting of perspectives that really build to the layering of this story Jason!! So smartly done!!
Omen, anyone?
Oh, very well done!
This is mysterious and well-written. Nice setup
What a cliffhanger!!
Oooh, my curiosity is piqued. Well done.
Why on earth did she not lock the door behind her. Now hell comes for us all. Wonder if the child returns, if so as what or who.?
Like dominoes, the chain of reactions continues. Poor kid! Well written, Jason!
Oh, now I want to follow that child through the door, Jason. You cannot keep the reader just hanging!