The Room
It wasn't what you expected to wake up to. But he made the most of it.
There was only one rule: don’t open the door. A rule that was placed on a sticker next to it. My heart skipped as I tried to figure out how I got there. And how I was going to get out of this room. All that was in it was me. A small twin sized mattress that was laying on the floor. A dresser that had none of its drawers on it.
A small nightstand table without a drawer either.
An open closet with a door that was off its hinges. Which was empty. Like everything else in this stupid room. As I tried searching for any hints on how to get out of the room. There weren’t any windows in it. And I couldn’t understand how I ended up in this place. I tried to check in any space that I could. And I found nothing. There wasn’t anything else aside from the one note. No other ones about why I was there or who took me. Just that I couldn’t leave the room. As I tried to find another way around the front door, I found an odd handle in the closet. One that took a bit of effort to yank open. Revealing a small opening that smelled dusty. But other than that, it seemed pretty safe, and it was better than just being trapped. And there was oddly enough a flashlight hanging in the small space.
That should have been my first clue this was wrong.
But I was too desperate to get free to even start to care. So, I took it and dropped down inside. Closing the door behind me. Only hearing the scratching a few seconds after crawling through the tunnel. I wish I hadn’t gone in.
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Raphael Fontenelle
Horror movie fan trying to write decent horror.
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I felt your fear and confusion as you searched for a way out. The detail about the dusty tunnel made it even creepier!
I definitely felt claustrophobic by the end of this. One of my worst nightmares. Good work, keep it up.
Very Interesting
Again though, I'm struck by the sense of what other option did the protagonist have?
Great storytelling - and eeek! I wouldn't have crawled through the tunnel!
A great sense of mystery with this. Happy to subscribe to your work. Congrats on Top Story.
great work
Oh eeek! The suspense in this is built with finesse. Well done.
The thrill and mystery of this story had gripped me from the very first moment. The protagonist is trapped in an empty, strange room, surrounded by the fear of the unknown, and only one rule—"Don't open the door." As the story progresses, the protagonist's restlessness and determination completely immerse me in his fear and confusion. When he entered the small tunnel, I, too, became a part of his hopes and mistakes. And in the end, when the sound of scratching was heard, my heart skipped a beat as well, thinking that I wished he hadn't gone there. A remarkable story. Congratulations on a top story!
Oh, yuck.....no.....! This is a true horror short story. Congratulations, too, on the Top Story.
Oh no……