The Doggie Door
A spooky micro. I hate this one, and I think you will too.
There was only one rule: don’t open the door!
Beyond that, the little boy can do as he pleases.
That only ever means pacing or chewing.
Sometimes he gets lost in thought and imagines voices— other children— right outside the door: whispering that everything will be alright.
But no.
His world is gray concrete, interrupted only by visits from the woman.
She tells him to call her momma.
He hears the kids on the other side begging him to just say it.
And he does, because she has trained him well.
…. He doesn’t want to lick his food off the cold floor anymore.
He likes the metal bowls, for his water and kibble.
Sometimes she scratches behind his ears and gives him some rawhide or a bone to chew.
But other times she whips him.
Sometimes he understands why… usually he has no clue, so he retreats into his memories.
He had a real momma once. He can hardly picture her face anymore, but he still remembers feeling safe.
The other kids promise: his real momma still loves him and he will see her again.
But he will not try the door, because he knows what happens to little doggies who make the big no-no.
He has seen the pictures, which the woman keeps so proudly.
Boys like him, with their eyes caved in, their faces bruised and leaking.
… When she showed him, he whimpered and promised to be good.
Then one day: the woman drops buckets of water and slop in his corner.
She locks the door, tests it twice.
Later the boy sees little shadows outside the door. He hears their voices: “now’s the time— don’t be afraid!”
Then the lock clicks and the door creaks open and all is silent, except for his heart.
About the Creator
Sam Spinelli
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Comments (5)
Scary!!!😐
Bro… you are a writing fiend… how many entries is this. You are crushing it. Great job the on the originality of this one man.
I'm too scared to read this so I wanna ask before reading. Is there a dog or any animal getting hurt or dying in this?
Creepy as hell, but I think you have something here!
Ugh, I hate this one. I went from writing a really fun werewolf story to writing this depressing mess. I could not bring myself to write the ending I’m picturing, and deliberately left it open ended so we can fill in a happier conclusion in our minds. But this story is directly inspired by psych studies on learned helplessness, and I imagined it ending with an open door and the boy cowering and refusing to use it. I hate that very much. I included the ghosts to give the story more hope, not sure if it worked. Anyway, I’m wide open to feedback and criticism. The harsher the better. Not only because I want pointers on how to improve my writing, but also because in this case I kinda want to personally destroy this story.