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The 6:17 to Somewhere New

Sometimes, going back is the only way forward

By Alain SUPPINIPublished 7 months ago 5 min read
Winner in The Second First Time Challenge

Marc hadn’t taken the 6:17 PM train in nearly two years.

Not since he left the job he thought he’d die in, not since Elise had walked out with the last of their shared plants and all the warmth from the apartment. Not since he stopped believing in rhythms - that predictable cadence of departure and return that used to structure his weeks like a heartbeat.

But today, for reasons even he couldn’t quite explain, he found himself back on the same platform, under the same flickering fluorescent lights, his fingers curled around a coffee gone cold. The paper cup trembled slightly in his hand, though not from the temperature. He’d always thought returning somewhere familiar would feel safe, like muscle memory. But instead it felt like standing at the edge of something deep and old.

The train pulled in with its usual screech and sigh. The doors opened like a held breath finally released. Marc stepped in, hesitating just long enough to question what the hell he was doing. Then he let the door slide shut behind him and walked down to the fourth car.

He chose a seat by the window. The vinyl upholstery cracked in the same spots. The metal bar in front of him bore the same faded sticker - “Mind the gap. And your thoughts.” Probably left by a poet or a prankster long ago.

As the train lurched into motion, Marc let his head rest lightly against the glass. Outside, the city blurred - an impressionist smear of lights and balconies and people in mid-step. It had all changed, and it hadn’t. Maybe he had, too. Maybe that’s why it felt like the first time, all over again.

And then, at the third stop, she boarded.

Clara.

Wagon 4. Just like always.

Marc’s breath caught. His fingers tightened around the coffee. She hadn’t changed - no, that wasn’t true. She had. Her hair was shorter now, just past her chin, curling in that soft way that spoke of rain or rebellion. She wore that same brown leather satchel he remembered, still fraying at the edges. And in her left hand, a book - thumb tucked between the pages like someone who wanted to be able to find her way back to something quickly.

Their eyes met. Just for a second. But that was enough.

He looked away.

The first time he’d seen her - two years ago, maybe more - she’d been reading The Bell Jar. He’d never asked her name, never said a word. Just watched her from the safety of routine. Week after week. She always got on at the same stop, sat in the same row, always read, always kept a quiet perimeter around her like a small, self-contained universe.

She had been the punctuation to his Fridays.

She moved down the aisle and - was it intentional? - took a seat two rows across from him, diagonal, within peripheral view. Not so close as to break the illusion of coincidence. But not far enough to dismiss the possibility of something more.

She opened her book. He couldn’t see the title this time. His heart was pounding louder than the train.

What would happen if he spoke?

The idea felt absurd. Who was he now, anyway? A man rebuilding from the ruins of the last two years? Someone who had left a version of himself on this very line, only to return like a ghost hoping for a second ending?

He remembered the old him - briefcase, earbuds, jaw clenched. Always somewhere else. Always one breath behind his own life. Maybe Clara had remembered that version of him, too.

The train rounded a curve, sudden and sharp. His cup jerked. A splash of coffee landed on his wrist, hot and humbling.

And then - a voice.

“Still not watching the turns.”

He turned.

She was looking at him. Smiling. Not at the spill, but at him. There was amusement in her eyes, but no mockery. Recognition, maybe. Something warmer.

“You remember me?” he asked, before he could think better of it.

“I do,” she said simply. “You always had your earbuds in but never listened to anything.”

His brow furrowed. “How would you know that?”

She leaned forward slightly. “You never tapped your foot. Never nodded your head. Just stared out the window like you were listening to a dream.”

“I guess I was,” he said. “Back then.”

“And now?”

He hesitated. Then: “Trying to be here again.”

Clara closed her book and rested it on her lap. “Me too.”

They sat in a comfortable quiet for a few moments. The sound of the train filled the space between them like water in a glass. Something fragile, but full.

“Why today?” he asked finally.

“I don’t know,” she said. “I left this route behind when I changed jobs. Took a new place closer to the center. But something about this week… it pulled me back. I thought I’d just take the train, see how it felt. Like trying on an old coat. Seeing if it still fits.”

He nodded. “Yeah. I know what you mean.”

They paused again.

Outside, the sky deepened to a blue that almost looked like memory.

“I used to wonder what you were reading,” he said, surprising even himself.

“And I used to wonder what you were avoiding,” she replied, just as softly.

He looked at her. “Maybe I was avoiding talking to you.”

She smiled. “Well, now you’re not.”

They talked until the second-to-last stop. About little things. Music. Coffee. Books. The sound of rain on windows. The quiet shame of giving up something good just because it felt too much. The harder path of coming back.

As the train slowed, Clara stood.

“I’m getting off at the next one,” she said, adjusting the strap of her bag.

He hesitated.

“So am I,” he said. It wasn’t his stop anymore. Not in a literal sense. But maybe, in another way, it always had been.

She raised an eyebrow. “You sure?”

“No,” he said. “But I’d rather regret getting off than regret staying on.”

She didn’t respond right away. Then she smiled. Not a wide grin. Just a small, private truth made visible.

They stepped off together.

The platform smelled of damp concrete and rust. Overhead, pigeons shuffled along the beams like time trying to find its footing.

“I never asked,” she said, turning to him. “Your name?”

“Marc.”

“I’m Clara.”

They shook hands. Slowly. Like it meant something.

Then they walked. Not quickly. Not as strangers. They walked like people who had decided not to miss the moment again.

Behind them, the 6:17 pulled away, carrying other versions of themselves - older, quieter, untouched. But here, on this small concrete platform on a Friday night, two people had returned to something once familiar and found, within it, something quietly new.

Like it was the first time.

Short Story

About the Creator

Alain SUPPINI

I’m Alain — a French critical care anesthesiologist who writes to keep memory alive. Between past and present, medicine and words, I search for what endures.

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  • Lightning Bolt ⚡4 months ago

    This is certainly the cream of the crop! You brought tears to my eyes. And I did some kind of cross between a gasp and a "Ha!" when you said 'the punctuation to his Friday.' Absolutely love it. Simple and sweet story. Congratulations on you greatly-deserved accolade. ⚡ 💙Bill ⚡

  • Adam Clost5 months ago

    Wow, apologies for coming late to the party but congratulations on the win, very well-deserved. I loved how you crafted the personalities of these two characters by giving us little details about their behaviours -- Marc being tightly wound, anxious, stressed and Clara being very observant (the music comment was great!) and thoughtful. I also think many of us have experienced the 'longing from afar' happening here, the emotions and feelings that go along with that resonate so clearly. I honestly think your story should have ended on the "....something quietly new" line. It was a beautiful way to wrap things. Fantastic job on this.

  • Marie Wilson5 months ago

    Brilliant. Congrats!

  • Congratulations Alain. You write beautifully. ❤️

  • Tiffany Gordon5 months ago

    Stunning work! Congratulations! 🎉🎉🎉🎉

  • What a great piece! I love your choices of simile and metaphor. Honored to be featured alongside your woork.

  • This was so well deserving of the prize and a super Top story! I fell in love with the moments passing on the train, was engaged quickly and felt pensive, rather suspended within right up until the end. Fantastic piece Alain!

  • Theresa Marie Cain5 months ago

    This was absolutely beautiful. It softened a bit of a hardened place in my heart. Thank you.

  • Wooohooooo congratulations on your win! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊

  • Antoni De'Leon6 months ago

    This has all the ingredients of the perfect story for romance. Fairytale dream and perfect timing, Congrats.

  • Aspen Noble6 months ago

    This was such a beautifully written piece—tender, atmospheric, and filled with quiet emotional truth. I loved the gentle rhythm of the prose and how much you said through silence and small gestures. The ending gave me goosebumps. Huge congratulations on your well-deserved win! It’s an honor to be featured alongside your work.

  • Hi, we are featuring your excellent Top Story in our Community Adventure Thread in The Vocal Social Society on Facebook, and would love for you to join us there

  • K. C. Wexlar6 months ago

    Beautiful story - how did he know her name was Clara? Did I miss that?

  • Congrats on your Top Story. Well deserved

  • Dr Hamza Yaqoob 6 months ago

    Your words touched me more deeply than I expected—sometimes we write through pain, and sometimes we heal through someone else’s. Thank you for reminding me that stories like ours matter. I’m also someone who writes from a place of struggle and silent strength. Following you now—and I’d be honored if you ever visit my corner of Vocal too. We rise when we lift each other.

  • Abdulmusawer6 months ago

    Such a soft, soulful ending. Feels like a gentle reminder that sometimes, life gives us a second chance—not to go back, but to begin again... only this time, with open eyes and full hearts. Quietly beautiful

  • Richard Smith6 months ago

    This was very informative. Thanks for putting it together in such an accessible way.

  • Adwoa K6 months ago

    Wow

  • Jane Smith7 months ago

    wow

  • Mahmood Afridi7 months ago

    Congratulations 🎉🎉

  • This was quietly breathtaking. You captured that fragile space between nostalgia and possibility so well—the ache of the familiar, and the courage it takes to return. A beautiful reminder that sometimes, second chances arrive on the same train as the past.

  • Rosie Ford 7 months ago

    Wow, your prose is beautiful! I hardly ever finish stories I start on here, but this one kept me interested the whole way through. Great job, but now I want to know what happens afterward!

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