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Raiders

A Story Every Day in 2024 Dec 8th ?/366

By Rachel DeemingPublished about a year ago 2 min read
Raiders
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This story comes with a Dharrsheena warning.

I'd been warned about black and white raiders from day one. Mum was always keen to share stories about anything that could hurt us, from the time that we were born really. She wanted us to be prepared. She never meant for us to be scared, just alert, because it could happen and she knew of others who had been victims of the thugs.

She wanted us to survive, that was all but it terrified us nonetheless.

I wondered if she knew more about it personally than she let on.

"One day, you'll be leaving the nest and branching out with your own little fledglings to think about," she'd tweet. We'd laugh at her in her earnestness. She'd merely cock her head at us and nod knowingly.

Time soon flies and before we all knew it, I'd got myself a mate and we were soon expecting. It was down to me to make sure that she and our young ones were provided for and so, off I went, practicing every day, bringing home the bacon fat and the seeds of a good life.

I always felt like I was cautious. I was no bird brain. I knew fat cats were lurking everywhere, waiting for their opportunity to pounce and expand what they had at your expense, never mind the raiders.

But raiders were clever. Crafty. Bigger than me, always on the prowl, their harsh cry a sign of their approach, like a group of bandits. They'd watch, sharp faces and bright eyes. Bastards.

"You've not been followed, have you?" the missus would ask on my return and I'd assure her that no, I'd been careful on the wing, ducking and diving, piloting my way back to her with every precaution taken.

She'd settle back down again then, sitting pretty, the warmth from her small, little body radiating outwards as we waited expectantly for our young ones' arrival.

But I was wrong. I had been followed.

They waited until I'd gone to ransack my home.

The missus had flown. Broken remnants of sky blue shell was all that was left of my family. Brutal it was.

But they won't win next time. This robin won't let them.

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366 words

I apologise for the grim nature of this tale. I apologise for no Little Red Leaf instalment today. Just need to keep going for a little bit longer...

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Rachel Deeming

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  • Cindy Calderabout a year ago

    Oh, but I loved this story so much - it was so cleverly woven, and I never had a clue until the end.

  • D.K. Shepardabout a year ago

    Well this was downright devastating and clever as all get out! Great work, Rachel!

  • I appreciate you soooo deeply for that warning 🥺❤️ I scrolled down slowly so that this registers as a read and saw your authors notes. I'm kinda sad there's no Laney episode today but I also feel that you don't owe any one an apology for that. You do you, Super Rach! 🥰🥰🥰

  • D. J. Reddallabout a year ago

    Your compassion for innocent robins does you great credit, as do your efforts to spare Dharrsheena the most ghastly details of the raid.

  • Sean A.about a year ago

    Well done! Will this robin seek a bat?

  • Testabout a year ago

    Damn... I should have known when you added the Darsheena warning that animals were getting hurt. So sad but so well told!! Great work Rachel!!

  • Caroline Cravenabout a year ago

    Oh no, the poor Robin. This was so well written though - loved it.

  • Gerard DiLeoabout a year ago

    Lovenest, not. Beware the shadowed wings above. Well done.

  • Olufemi Afolabiabout a year ago

    great story...

  • Andrea Corwin about a year ago

    Apology …. 🤔 ugh (because I am a birdwatcher) - I love birds and hate the murder of crows or the pair of them flying over with a baby bird! You captured it all well from the bird POV, Rachel!! 💕Great story but heartbreaking visions.🙀

  • L.I.Eabout a year ago

    Although it was sad... It was good. Amazing storytelling.

  • Cathy holmesabout a year ago

    It's the nature of the beast. Raiders gotta eat, though I feel bad for the Robin. I was admiring a hawk in the tree outside my window, thinking what a majestic creature she was. Then the swooped and plucked a squirrel off the ground, and like, noooooo.

  • Andrew C McDonaldabout a year ago

    Sadly whimsical. Beautifully written. 🥲

  • Laura.the.writerabout a year ago

    You captured the nature of these birds so wonderfully, though it is a sad ending🥺

  • John Coxabout a year ago

    Clever bit of writing, this! Corvids are some especially smart birds!

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