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Once More

Sixty Seconds, Then It's Time to Go

By Bradley RamseyPublished 2 years ago Updated 2 years ago 3 min read
Runner-Up in Just a Minute Challenge

The hospital room was empty. Some outdated game show was playing on the TV with the volume on mute. I couldn’t move, and I could barely breathe.

The clock on the wall, old and yellowed with time, stopped ticking when he walked in—a sharp-dressed man with pale skin and icy blue eyes. He walked with a stutter, depending on a polished cane to steady his movement.

He sat on the edge of the bed and leaned his cane against the window.

“You know who I am?” he asked.

I nodded.

He looked around the empty room. “No one came to see you?”

“Anyone who cared is either gone, or they already wrote me off.”

The man reached into his coat and pulled out a worn leather book. He licked one of his slender fingers and turned to a page about halfway through the book.

“Strange, you seem like a good person. I’ll give you sixty seconds. Your choice; give me a day and a time.”

My eyes wandered up to the frozen clock.

“Sixty seconds until what?”

The man’s piercing gaze burrowed into me.

“I think you know.”

“Okay, April 23rd, five years ago, just before sunset,” I said.

The man raised an eyebrow as he flipped through the pages of his book.

“What’s so special about that moment?”

“It’s the last time I was happy.”

The man closed his book and nodded. He pulled an ornate pocket watch out of his coat and flipped it open.

“Your time starts now.”

I blinked, and the hospital room was gone. The first thing I felt was the crisp and cool air you only get from a place untouched by civilization. The top of a mountain, the edge of a beach, the center of a forgotten forest. That’s where we were, far from everything.

A half-empty bottle of wine sat nestled in the grass beside a blanket. Cucumber sandwiches graced tiny plates as cicadas sang in the trees around us. We had carved out this moment together, a singular point in time meant only for us.

I felt her fingers crawl into mine, like sliding beneath a warm blanket. I turned away from the sunset on the horizon and looked at her.

Hues of red and orange, evening colors, danced across her skin. Her eyes held my entire universe, glistening with galaxies all their own. She smiled, and I smiled back. Our problems felt like distant memories.

“You’ve never looked more beautiful,” I whispered.

Her smile widened. “Then do something about it.”

I slid toward her and leaned in close. Her perfume washed over me. A comforting scent that carried a thousand emotions. I ran my hand through her silken hair as our lips collided. Possibilities exploded outward like supernovas, sending ripples through the cosmos.

“Time’s up.”

I watched her fall away from me as time passed like a slideshow on fast-forward. I saw everything I had ever done and wanted, all the possibilities soaring by on some phantom wind.

I blinked, and I was back in the hospital bed. The man put away his pocket watch and extended his empty hand.

“What if I’m not ready?” I asked.

The man shrugged. “No one ever is.”

I took his hand and climbed out of the bed. He led me to the door. Beyond it was a blinding light. I looked back at my body lying in the bed.

“Tell me, does it get better after this?” I asked.

“Better. Worse. Hard to say. It changes; I can promise you that,” the man replied.

I felt the tug of his hand, and together, we walked through the doorway into that unending light.

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About the Creator

Bradley Ramsey

Lover of dogs, gaming, and long walks on the beach. Content Marketing Manager by day, aspiring writer by night. Alone, we cannot change the world, but we can create better ones.

Find me on Substack -> bradleyramsey.substack.com

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  • Rohitha Lanka11 months ago

    I like your writing congratulations to challenged

  • D.K. Shepard2 years ago

    Brilliantly done! So well written and a great concept developed masterfully! Congrats on the challenge placement!

  • Caroline Craven2 years ago

    Gosh, I thought this was so clever and well written. Glad it was placed in the challenge.

  • Anna 2 years ago

    Congrats on your win!<3

  • Melissa Lagani2 years ago

    BRADLERS 😩😭😩😭🙌🏽🙌🏽💜💜 I had no words. All the feels 💜💜💜

  • CJ Miller2 years ago

    What a beautiful, vividly rendered story! I loved this line: "The clock on the wall, old and yellowed with time, stopped ticking when he walked in..." Great job! 💕

  • Wooohooooo congratulations on your win! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊

  • The Dani Writer2 years ago

    This story takes the reader on a sensory-filled, plausible journey that is hard to deny. Great writing skills here, Bradley!

  • Sarah Rusch2 years ago

    This is a really beautiful story! I loved it.

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