There it was, glorious and inviting, the perfect reward for his patience and planning. They hadn't even bothered to encase it. It was boldly displayed on a simple platform, completely unguarded. Tubs was disappointed in the lack of imagination, but not stupid enough to pass up such a perfect opportunity.
Taking full advantage of his excellent night vision, he quickly and silently covered the distance to the display without detection. He scanned his surroundings one more time. Erring on the side of caution was one of the keys to his long list of successes. That and carefully casing each job, as he'd been doing for 3 days prior to tonight's little caper.
No guards, no wires, no lights. Just a simple, mechanical trigger that won't even slow me down. Time to get it and go!
With a confident, gentle touch born of experience, he lifted the golden object swiftly and confidently from its perch on the platform. Not a single vibration. Smooth as the cheeks of his lady love, sleeping peacefully at home.
Tubs deftly balanced his aromatic trophy as he sped back along the path he'd taken from the entrance. A sudden “Snap!” heralded another thief's swift demise.
Amateurs!
***
Thanks for reading my little "tail". This was written for the Micro Heist Challenge, which prompts: Write a microfiction story about a heist in exactly 200 words. Read all about it here:
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Comments (11)
Nice one Dana! I really liked how you described how enticing the gold looked!
LOL! This was great, Dana! Sorry I am very late to the party on this one. So much detail and then a great little twist, in just 200 words, bravo!
Loved this, the final "snap" also clicking on the light in my brain. You gave few direct clues, but aromatic trophy was sufficient. You go, Tubs. Nice writing, Dana!!!💙Anneliese
Rats!!!!
"And it's all in a mouse's night." I'm a Genesis fan. Great idea for a story Dana!
Lol, you did a good job there misleading us! Tubs is soooo cute 🤣
You dirty 🐀! Glad Tubs made a clean getaway. 😅 Great work, Dana!
Okay, thoroughly faked me out with the picture. I wasn't even thinking rodent then snap, it hit me.
Nicely done! Baited in enough and BAM!
Awesome writing Dana! Well done!
Oh snap (hehe, I couldn't resist)! I live in a house built in 1750 so there are a lot of 'prizes' sitting around that I hope lure in less clever thieves :) Wonderful story!!