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Glass Veins

They Throb.

By Michelle Liew Tsui-LinPublished 3 months ago โ€ข 3 min read
Runner-Up in A Knock at the Door Challenge
Glass Veins
Photo by Jilbert Ebrahimi on Unsplash

One can be too clean.

๐Ÿ’ฅ๐Ÿ’ฅ๐Ÿ’ฅ๐Ÿ’ฅ๐Ÿ’ฅ๐Ÿ’ฅ๐Ÿ’ฅ๐Ÿ’ฅ๐Ÿ’ฅ๐Ÿ’ฅ๐Ÿ’ฅ๐Ÿ’ฅ๐Ÿ’ฅ๐Ÿ’ฅ๐Ÿ’ฅ๐Ÿ’ฅ

An after-hours nurse, Rin had made cleanliness his lifeโ€”Marie Kondo would have called his dedication to sterility an obsessive-compulsive disorder.

Nothing could be out of order.

Or dirty.

Not a speck of dust.

He got into bed one morning, put out after his shift.

But woke with a start. His apartment was cleanโ€”too clean. He was a neat freak, but this level of cleanliness was enough to send someone as fastidious as he was over the edge.

Oddโ€”an operating theatre too clean.

He looked at himself in the mirror.

There was NOTHING to look at.

Nothing except broken images that looked like outstretched handsโ€”

Gangly.

Wieldy.

Like glitching glass veins.

Pulsing.

KNOCK.

KNOCK.

KNOCK.

Startled, Rin touched a window to see a handโ€”

Not his.

NEVER his.

๐Ÿ’ฅ๐Ÿ’ฅ๐Ÿ’ฅ๐Ÿ’ฅ๐Ÿ’ฅ๐Ÿ’ฅ๐Ÿ’ฅ๐Ÿ’ฅ๐Ÿ’ฅ๐Ÿ’ฅ๐Ÿ’ฅ๐Ÿ’ฅ๐Ÿ’ฅ๐Ÿ’ฅ๐Ÿ’ฅ๐Ÿ’ฅ๐Ÿ’ฅ

KNOCK.

KNOCK.

KNOCK.

The glass pulsed. To the knockโ€™s rhythm.

The veins in the glass throbbed harder.

Brighter.

Red.

Then white.

KNOCK.

Thud. His chest answered.

The window fogged.

Scrawled letters on the frosted pane.

KNOCK.

Cracks appeared, a mangled spiderweb, across the mirror.

His own pulse skipped. It sounded just like the knock.

The fingers grew longer.

More gangly.

Pressing harder on the pane.

KNOCK.

It rockedโ€”like a petrified heart.

๐ŸŒโœจ๐ŸŒโœจ๐ŸŒโœจ๐ŸŒโœจ๐ŸŒโœจ๐ŸŒโœจ๐ŸŒโœจ๐ŸŒโœจ

The crack in the windows widenedโ€”light bled through, as if bones had split.

In the middle of the fractureโ€”an eye.

It blinkedโ€”and winked.

Too close.

Too knowing.

Another knockโ€”within his chest.

Then a finger passed through the glass.

It pointedโ€”at him.

Dripping static and leaving a dripping trail of red.

Rinโ€™s ribs tightened, locking him in place.

The rhythm had bound him.

The apartment door rattled to its urgent beat.

Then, something within the mirror moved.

The lights followed the pulseโ€”Vibrating.

Too exact.

๐Ÿ”Š๐Ÿ’ข๐Ÿ”Š๐Ÿ’ข๐Ÿ”Š๐Ÿ’ข๐Ÿ”Š๐Ÿ’ข๐Ÿ”Š๐Ÿ’ข๐Ÿ”Š๐Ÿ’ข๐Ÿ”Š๐Ÿ’ข๐Ÿ”Š๐Ÿ’ข

The mirrorโ€™s surface stretchedโ€”-bulging, bated breath from within its depths.

The eye within the fracture multiplied, blinking.

Syncing with the knock.

The veins in the window lashedโ€”its binds tightening.

The door creakedโ€”the knob turned.

A tad.

The lights flickered againโ€”Rinโ€™s pulse quickened to the same rhythm.

Static crept into the airโ€”his ears buzzed.

Then, a shadow.

Seeping in from the gap below the door.

A crack within the mirror formed.

A mouth.

Gaping.

Teeth withinโ€”sharp.

The door handle twisted fully.

๐Ÿฉธ๐Ÿ–๏ธ๐Ÿฉธ๐Ÿ–๏ธ๐Ÿฉธ๐Ÿ–๏ธ๐Ÿฉธ๐Ÿ–๏ธ๐Ÿฉธ๐Ÿ–๏ธ๐Ÿฉธ๐Ÿ–๏ธ๐Ÿฉธ๐Ÿ–๏ธ๐Ÿฉธ๐Ÿ–๏ธ

The mouth moved.

Not speakingโ€”whispering.

The shadow under the door thickened, spreading across the floorโ€”โ€”

An irremovable stain.

The door shook uncontrollably.

Thenโ€”stopped.

Silence.

KNOCK.

From within the room.

White lights flaredโ€”turning a garish red.

The mouth opened widerโ€”-the frame ripped apart.

It. Crawled. Out.

๐Ÿ”€๐Ÿ”€๐Ÿชž๐Ÿง๐Ÿชž๐Ÿง๐Ÿ”€๐Ÿชž๐Ÿง๐Ÿ”€๐Ÿชž๐Ÿง๐Ÿ”€๐Ÿชž๐Ÿง

It slithered out of the doorframe, bendingโ€”

To him.

It approached, raking its fingers across the wall.

Creating sparks from within each scrape.

Then, the mouth snapped shut.

But the light from the glass still bled.

The shadow under the door seeped around him, circling his feet.

Locking him in place.

His face-half his, half static.

His teeth flickered.

The knocking continuedโ€”from within his chest.

In time with his breath.

Pulse.

Fear.

๐Ÿ”€๐Ÿ”€๐Ÿชž๐Ÿง๐Ÿชž๐Ÿง๐Ÿ”€๐Ÿชž๐Ÿง๐Ÿ”€๐Ÿชž๐Ÿง๐Ÿ”€๐Ÿชž๐Ÿง

The sparks from the wall burned the veins in the glassโ€”fire crawling through arteries.

The shadow wound tighter around his ankles, dragging him.

Rin saw himself at work, masked, a scalpel in hand.

Wiping the operating table the surgeon was working onโ€”

Incessant.

Continuous.

The thingโ€™s mouth openedโ€”not to breathe out, but breathe in.

Sucking his breath.

His chest collapsed with its rhythmโ€”each knock sucked a heartbeat.

The mirror quaked, a fractured web.

๐Ÿ”€๐Ÿ”€๐Ÿชž๐Ÿง๐Ÿชž๐Ÿง๐Ÿ”€๐Ÿชž๐Ÿง๐Ÿ”€๐Ÿชž๐Ÿง๐Ÿ”€๐Ÿชž๐Ÿง

The fire veins were a virtual tarantula, bursting through the mirrorโ€™s cracks.

The Thing drew a final breath inโ€”

Deep.

The glass veins snappedโ€”

A shower of red light.

The shadow around Rin shrilled, yanking the fissure, along with the Thing.

Rin fell back on his chair, collapsed.

Breathing.

His room, as it was.

Just cracks.

In the mirror.

And himself. Scalpel. Disinfectant.

And cloth.

In his mouth.

The knocks continued.

๐Ÿ”€๐Ÿ”€๐Ÿชž๐Ÿง๐Ÿชž๐Ÿง๐Ÿ”€๐Ÿชž๐Ÿง๐Ÿ”€๐Ÿชž๐Ÿง๐Ÿ”€๐Ÿชž๐Ÿง

Original story by Michelle Liew Tsui-Lin. AI tags are coincidental.

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About the Creator

Michelle Liew Tsui-Lin

Hi, i am an English Language teacher cum freelance writer with a taste for pets, prose and poetry. When I'm not writing my heart out, I'm playing with my three dogs, Zorra, Cloudy and Snowball.

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  • Sam Spinelli3 months ago

    That was a pretty cool read. Disturbing verbal imagery and dark word choice throughout felt entirely unique and very atmospheric. This story had such a poetic feel, and a powerful surreal effect.

  • Marilyn Glover3 months ago

    Michelle, I absolutely love what you did with this challenge prompt. Congratulations on your win!๐Ÿฅฐ๐Ÿ‘

  • Congratulations on your win, Michelle ๐Ÿ˜Š๐ŸŽ‰

  • Wooohooooo congratulations on your win! ๐ŸŽ‰๐Ÿ’–๐ŸŽŠ๐ŸŽ‰๐Ÿ’–๐ŸŽŠ

  • Sean A.3 months ago

    Congratulations!

  • Cindy Calder3 months ago

    Oh, wow, but this one is genius, Michelle. Superb response to the prompt at hand. Haunting in its intensity, too.

  • Oh shit, this was soooo freaking creeepppyyyy! You nailed this challenge!

  • Sean A.3 months ago

    Horrifyingly well done! Good luck with the challenge

  • C. Rommial Butler3 months ago

    Well-wrought! Magical surrealism? Your narratives are always unique and engaging!

  • I could literally hear the breathing between the lines....wow!

  • Mariann Carroll3 months ago

    I can see this being a book series

  • Lana V Lynx3 months ago

    This was perfectly terrifying, Michelle! Iโ€™m glad Rin is alive, but is he still himself?

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