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Fears and Derision

A Story Every Day in 2024 Sept 28 272/366

By Rachel DeemingPublished about a year ago Updated about a year ago 2 min read
Fears and Derision
Photo by Danilo Batista on Unsplash

Bethan

I don't want to ring him because I know what I'll hear: derision, impatience, irritation.

Dave. Laney's dad. My husband. Ex-husband.

But who else is there?

This photo is significant. I know it. Otherwise, why send it? My memory is retrieving nothing except images of her. He has to help me.

*

Matt and Luke

"You told me she went into the water," Luke states after thinking about Matt's open ended statement. Luke watches Matt like a hawk. Luke was the only one out of them who didn't see what actually happened. Matt and Mark did...

Matt relaxes visibly. "Yes, you're right." Matt pales. "Oh God. Poor Laney."

They both stay silent for a moment, transported once again back there.

The door of the pub opens and a group of girls burst in, the cold along with their laughter breaking the spell. Matt and Luke are both grateful for it.

Matt gulps his drink and then says, "What about Mark?'

Luke says, "What?"

"Do you think he's had anything?"

Luke thinks. "I don't know. Are you in touch at all?" Luke is dreading hearing that they are. He'll have been left out of the loop if they have.

"No, I don't know where he is. Haven't for years," Matt replies, and Luke is relieved and ashamed of feeling this way after all this time about a friendship from years ago. "I know he was...well, we all were...but him in particular...you know, was...affected...by it all."

Luke nods. Mark was always the most volatile of them: he had an edge that felt dangerous, sharp, like he was on the brink of badness, but Laney softened him. He'd become withdrawn after, when they hung out. He never had the same jokes or joy. Laney lifted them all but with her...going, their friendship became a deflated balloon, flat, withered and discarded.

"I wouldn't know where to find him. He doesn't live close anymore."

Luke could understand that, sometimes wished he'd moved himself.

They sat again, quietly, drinking and thinking.

"So, what do we do?" Matt asks.

Luke stays silent.

"Someone knows, Luke." Matt taps the table.

Luke looks startled.

"I don't like it," Matt adds. "They could destroy us."

***

366 words

The story started here:

And then there's been an instalment every day since.

Yesterday's was this:

Thanks for stopping by! If you do read this, please leave a comment as I love to interact with my readers.

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Rachel Deeming

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  • Caitlin Charltonabout a year ago

    Oh no, she’s catching on and getting more insistent. 😬 With… mark out of the picture and pulling our minds to the fact that mark… and Matt were the only two who saw what happened… and setting them against each other in our minds but not necessarily in theirs… I am in awe at how much work you put into this 👌🏽♥️👏🏽

  • Grz Colmabout a year ago

    Another intriguing entry Rachel.

  • Paul Stewartabout a year ago

    oooh this is getting deeper and sadder! well done, chum!

  • D.K. Shepardabout a year ago

    “Laney lifted them all but with her...going, their friendship became a deflated balloon, flat, withered and discarded.” really great description and sad

  • Cindy Calderabout a year ago

    Someone's watching....from the corner....I'd be willing to bet.

  • John Coxabout a year ago

    Their already destroyed. They just don't have the wits to notice. Really well done, Rachel!

  • Caroline Cravenabout a year ago

    Definitely hooked. This is so good.

  • Cathy holmesabout a year ago

    Someone definitely knows. But who?

  • Lana V Lynxabout a year ago

    Mark on the brink of badness stepped over the brink? So gripping, Rachel.

  • Hmmm… guessing we track Mark down.🧐🤔

  • Karan w. about a year ago

    I very much appreciate your work! Wonderful story ✨

  • "No, I don't know where he is. Haven't for years," Mark replies Did you mean Matt? Lol, their names are so close together, even I get confused

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