Farewell
Just a tiny speck in the universe
She gazed into the sky, a bruised canvas of midnight blue, salted with stars. Light shimmered through the pines, leaving splashes of silver on the earth below.
She wasn’t sure anymore.
She had wanted to go, to join Rosamond and Leon on Gliese 667 Cc, but this world was so beautiful. Could she say good-bye? What if Gliese didn’t have forests and trees and grass and bubbling brooks? What if it was just gray dust and empty craters? She took a deep breath, absorbing the ageless beauty of the night sky.
At least she'd still have the stars.
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Ahna Lewis
Just a high school English teacher who never quite got over her dream of becoming an author. :)
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So beautifully bittersweet ❤️
Ahna, this was a really beautiful story! Your descriptive language was breath taking, I loved the images you painted for the read with your words! You word choices and way of writing just flowed so seamlessly! I am awestruck with the vivid imagery you were able to create in my mind! My favourite line was "... a bruised canvas of midnight blue, salted with stars..." That's going to sit with me for a long time simply for the mastery of those word choices!
This is beautiful writing. Congrats on the Top Story.
I read this a few days ago and hearted it, meant to come back sooner. Here I am and this is still stunning! Well done, Ahna, a moving piece with some truly spectacular descriptions and word choices. Congrats on Top Story.
This was really good! loved it!
Ah, you painted such a lovely picture. So hard to say good-bye to the known. Great work on this one and congratulations on Top Story :)
Nicely done, congrats on your TS!
Ahna Your story posseses a strong emotions and of course would be a great story to engage fully in. Well done Ahna!
I love this great story more of that.
Congratulations, beautifully worded, brought the world to life
Great story, Anha. And congrats! Luckily the stars will follow wherever she goes.
CONGRATULATIONS AHNA!! Top Story! Pauline 🌸💕
Awesome, ✨💖 Congratulations 🎆🎉📝😉Top Story❗❗❗🎉🎉🎉
Very nice. Congrats on the TS
Yay, congrats on Top Story!! 🤗❤️❤️
The first lines were so lyrical, they drew me in!!!
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Cool
what a great story
Couldn't she just come back if Gliese 667 Cc wasn't all that great?
Glad to see this one get top story. 💖
Awesome
Congratulations on a well-deserved top story Ahna!
Very lovely work! Congratulations on top story
Wow, this is absolutely stunning, Ahna! Congrats on top story!! 💫