You know those marks...
Some inspiration...
You know those marks
-------------those marks
----------------------------you know
They won't wash off
--------------wash off
------------------------they won't
You can't efface them
------------efface them
--------------------------you can't
They won't scrub off
--------------scrub off
-------------------------they won't
You know those marks
------------those marks
---------------------------you know
They won't easily disappear
--------------easily disappear
---------------------------------they won't
You can't remove them quickly
------------remove them quickly
-------------------------------------you can't
They won't endure indefinitely
--------------endure indefinitely
-------------------------------------they won't
You will heal from them
----------------from them
------------------------------you will heal
---------------------------------------------in time.
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Thanks for reading!
Author's Note: Had this idea bumping around my head and wanted to play around with the formatting a little.
Will be interested to know what you all thought.
If you have time and inclination, here are a couple of others to have a look at:
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Paul Stewart
Award-Winning Writer, Poet, Scottish-Italian, Subversive.
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So great! Awesome!
Omggggg, I loved this format so much! You need to come up with a name for it!
The stuttering brokenness of expression, almost as though dazed & confused, not knowing quite how to handle what has been done to them.
This read so well. I even read it out loud and felt like I was speaking in two voices. I will echo the other voices below and say it's a song without music! Yet ;)
A unique format and you made it flow. I agree with Judey. You've got a great song here.
Honestly great work getting the formatting to work!! That would have killed me
This is most def a song. The lead singer does the first line, and they backup does the call and refrain. What an interesting structure. Does it have a name ? Or should we Call it 'Paul's"?
Like the echo-esque tone.