we watched the world go dark. together.
an acrostic
everyone gathered to watch the world go dark. served
cheeses and homemade preserves. talked about the
light, the way it slid among the trees, an
infiltrator, the king of shadows come too early.
perhaps the greatest wonder was less the
sun's coy dance with daylight, and more the fact that
everyone drew the light back in a single sigh of awe. maybe relief.
About the Creator
Dane BH
By day, I'm a cog in the nonprofit machine, and poet. By night, I'm a creature of the internet. My soul is a grumpy cat who'd rather be sleeping.
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Day 4 of Quitting
If this is how sobriety feels, maybe it’s better to go through life a little buzzed… this, along with other hits like, I want to kill myself, I wish I was dead, and I’m going to throw myself off a bridge have been the only thoughts on rotation these past few days. I promise myself that if, in a month, I still feel like this (‘this’ meaning despondent, full of rage, and simultaneously numb) I can go back to smoking. Until mid-February though? Nicotine is off the table.
By sleepy drafts6 days ago in Longevity
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The suns coy dance with daylight. Just going around reading some poetry. Great acrostic poem.
Really like this line in particular- “king of shadows”. I like how treats the eclipse in a positive light, bringing people together. Nicely done Dane 👏
Hey, you were the first. Glad!
Excellent choice for First in the challenge! Yes… good point… how awful to live without light!
Really lovely work - the details you chose to include made me feel as though I was there!! Congrats on the win! :)
Congrats, words well chosen to bring the message.
So poetic and a well deserved win! CONGRATS! 🎉🎉🎉.
A wonderful poetic memento that will make time stand still. Congratulations on taking the top slot, Dane!
A moment perfectly captured. Congratulations!
I loved your poem, congrats on the big win!😚
This is beautiful, congrats on the win!
Awesome work, congrats on your win!
Congrats on your win, Dane!
Well done! 🏆
Congratulations on the win, Dane! 🥳
Congratulations Dane
Congratulations On a well deserved win So poetic and visually pleasing
Oh a very worthy winner.
Beautifully put!
A complete scene in an acrostic! "sun's coy dance with daylight" is such a great image of movement and mystery.